Put on your thinking caps....

[mayabean]

Once again, I need help. Most of you are aware of my current job status (if not, read back an entry or two). I think it is time for me to leave ARCW. However, I'd still like to stay in some sort of prevention work

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[jasmine13]

i like this coverletter. one suggestion that erica and i came up with. i'd nix the final sentence in your first large paragraph about your minor in dance and thinking "outside the box". i think that expression has become cliche. if you wanted to express it another way, i might say "creative/critical thinker", or some other concept. good luck interviewing. i know you'd be an amazing asset to their organization!

[mayabean]

didn't think of it that way. thanks!!!

[thelandlou]

Having lost a father to lung cancer, because of smoking, you will not find someone more committed to the cause than me.

How about including "or with an understanding of the most serious consequences of smoking"

overall awesome cover letter and I wish you all the luck in the world!

[thelandlou]

also I looked at the description and you can nail this!

[mayabean]

i thought it was everything i've done, in the last five years. i feel pretty confident, which is odd for me. :)

[mayabean]

EXCELLENT!! thanks, babe!

a few pointers...

[teenhealthdiva]

carla

Re: a few pointers...

[teenhealthdiva]

also, keep the language formal and non-personal. using "quoted statement" can read as too colloquial...

ok, i'm done..

Re: a few pointers...

[mayabean]

this is GREAT! at first, i thought putting up a rough draft of a cover letter was cheesy, but i KNEW i'd get great advice from the 3 of you! luckily, the deadline isn't until Nov. 4, so i have time to rehash! :)