Song lyrics

[master_jedi_bry]

well yeah i think i've made a small lyric thing for the song i just wrote.... i'll write them up here.
I'm basing them on thing sthat happened to our family, but i want it to make it seem more romantic; between girl and boyfriend.
give me some hints.

ok ok her it is
Its a 4/4 time piece and its got a weird beat. lol not really just mainly strum

Verse 1:
Half past twelve,
A saturday evening,
his heart was aching,
His family's torn apart,
by the reason of a person,
who was heartless and cruel,
he wanted too much,
and he said:

Chorus:
I went too far
I pushed too hard
She fell to the ground
and she waited, waited,
for me to say
i'm sorry babe,
for the things i said,
i just walked away

Verse 2:
She was pissed all day
and she took it out on others,
when he came home one day
she took no time to start
she began pushing,
hitting,
screaming,
He pushed her back
and he said:

(Chorus)

thats all i have so far... VErse two is a tad odd... i dunno if these lyrics would work for a song... i'm sorta iffy bout it... i'm gonna run them by my friend... i'll see what he thinks.
I also think i'll put more in the verses. most of this is in a four measure sequence, if that helps, bout a second per beat. i dunno, help me if ya can :D:D