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FFic: Redundant Chapter 33

Jan 02, 2011 23:16

An actual update this time. XD

I really hate asking, but feedback for this chapter would be most helpful. Specifically: I'm not sure if I've gotten Garrus' voice right. Insight from those who write Garrus regularly would be awesome. Feedback for anything else is also highly appreciated and always welcomed.

Title: Redundant
Chapter: 33 - Intercourse ( Read more... )

female shepard, joker, ashley williams, kaidan alenko, fanfic, urdnot wrex, garrus vakarian

Comments 2

sinvraal January 3 2011, 19:42:45 UTC

Word nerd alert! In that first sentence, generally people 'heartily' agree, not hardily. Hardy, as in tough, is different than hearty, as in sincere or unrestrained.

Your Garrus voice seems good to me, although I sometimes struggle with him too. I do like all the translator stuff, though. I understand why they went the Universal Translator route, but I still think it's fun to explore cultural differences.

oddlittleturtle January 3 2011, 20:57:59 UTC

D8< Oh, ack! I knew it looked funky, I just couldn't place what the problem was. You rock, Sin! Thanks!

Cultural differences FTW!

Poor Garrus. I've been avoiding him the entire story. D: