I love how you left little trails of clues all across the verse and only let out the big reveal at the last part. Way to keep us guessing.
I also loved how you left the ending kinda open. Leaves room for imagination or a good starting off point should you take it up again.
And yes, it would be awesome if you wrote more of this. But heck, I'll be honest...this such a good ending that it might be hard to to continue and ruin it. Hahahah. But yeah, continue if you can.
Thank you for this awesome comment! I'm so glad that you liked this and that you thought it was a good ending. I think so myself, by the way. I don't think I'll be writing more in here - the story I wanted to tell is told. Which doesn't mean I might visit the boys again. I have still got the Mel-situation in the back of my mind, because God knows the two Farlands are messed up big.
But I'm not sure I'll do good, and I know from too many stories or movies that doing more than you wanted to do only messes up everything.
Thank you again for sticking with me and for leaving me all these cool comments!
Yeah, well I'll be keeping tabs on your lj now and see what other stuff you come up with.
No pressure.
Ok...so a little pressure. But dude, your style of writing just rocks. I'd even offer beta services just to read your stuff earlier if RL wasn't kicking my ass right now. :D
Such a dark story but I really liked your take on this. It really can't be an easy subject to touch upon and you handled it really well and from several points of view. A really good read, thanks.
Thank you so much. I don't know what compelled me to write it. There were several amok-running kids these last years over here, and it never is really out of the papers. Then, there is the song I snagged the titles from, which is also a recurring soundtrack in my head. Also, I kinda got a bit sick over the prejudices against people who don't do anything worse than dress in black and like to play RPGs and listen to dark music. My younger brother is a happy-go-lucky guy, always was, and when he was in his goth-phase (pretty similar to Jensen in here) my grandma used to tell my mom to be careful, that he might get into drugs. She also told my bro that drugs are dangerous *earnest eyes*, which was kinda hilarious. True, but still funny.
So, it's a combination of several things that made me go there. And I'm really glad it worked for you.
I didn't really put too much effort in it to hide all the hints. I was kinda surprised it got so long as it is - and I didn't want to string anyone along too long. And I think, considering the main theme in this genre our mind goes these places automatically these days.
Thank you so much for the praise. I tried real hard to get across that things like these - and I'm mostly talking about the shooting, but also of course about the 'trainer-issue' - don't just go away after. Glad it worked for you, and thanks for telling me that.
Ii just wanted to tell you thank you. You helped me face some things in my past that II have tried to ignore. You handled the subject in a very (don't know what word I want here )I mean it was gentle,yet eye-opening. Again thank you :)
OH wow. I think that is one of the best compliments someone might get. I'm glad my story helped you and I very much hope you will be able to face your demons from now on.
I'm glad you liked it. I think I wouldn't be able to write anything worse, and I also think the 'little' things that can be done cause nearly as much damage as 'big' things.
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I love how you left little trails of clues all across the verse and only let out the big reveal at the last part. Way to keep us guessing.
I also loved how you left the ending kinda open. Leaves room for imagination or a good starting off point should you take it up again.
And yes, it would be awesome if you wrote more of this. But heck, I'll be honest...this such a good ending that it might be hard to to continue and ruin it. Hahahah. But yeah, continue if you can.
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Thank you for this awesome comment! I'm so glad that you liked this and that you thought it was a good ending. I think so myself, by the way.
I don't think I'll be writing more in here - the story I wanted to tell is told. Which doesn't mean I might visit the boys again. I have still got the Mel-situation in the back of my mind, because God knows the two Farlands are messed up big.
But I'm not sure I'll do good, and I know from too many stories or movies that doing more than you wanted to do only messes up everything.
Thank you again for sticking with me and for leaving me all these cool comments!
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No pressure.
Ok...so a little pressure. But dude, your style of writing just rocks. I'd even offer beta services just to read your stuff earlier if RL wasn't kicking my ass right now. :D
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A really good read, thanks.
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I don't know what compelled me to write it. There were several amok-running kids these last years over here, and it never is really out of the papers.
Then, there is the song I snagged the titles from, which is also a recurring soundtrack in my head.
Also, I kinda got a bit sick over the prejudices against people who don't do anything worse than dress in black and like to play RPGs and listen to dark music. My younger brother is a happy-go-lucky guy, always was, and when he was in his goth-phase (pretty similar to Jensen in here) my grandma used to tell my mom to be careful, that he might get into drugs. She also told my bro that drugs are dangerous *earnest eyes*, which was kinda hilarious. True, but still funny.
So, it's a combination of several things that made me go there. And I'm really glad it worked for you.
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I didn't really put too much effort in it to hide all the hints. I was kinda surprised it got so long as it is - and I didn't want to string anyone along too long. And I think, considering the main theme in this genre our mind goes these places automatically these days.
Thank you so much for the praise. I tried real hard to get across that things like these - and I'm mostly talking about the shooting, but also of course about the 'trainer-issue' - don't just go away after. Glad it worked for you, and thanks for telling me that.
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I'm glad my story helped you and I very much hope you will be able to face your demons from now on.
All the best
Marlowe
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I think I wouldn't be able to write anything worse, and I also think the 'little' things that can be done cause nearly as much damage as 'big' things.
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