Had to pick a Yama/Walldame_batsieDecember 30 2009, 18:52:15 UTC
He rounds the corner, and that’s when he smacks into the wall.
He goes down hard, the somehow-familiar impact reverberating through his bones. The shadow looms closer; he looks up, dazed, and gapes in stunned recognition.
Towering imposingly before him, the wall is somehow more menacing than ever before, its sleek black surface reflecting, like a mirror, the shocked gaze of the longtime rival who once again lies crumpled before it.
As Yamamoto stares in horror, the wall gazes back dispassionately, its rectangular outline leering at him as if to say, Hello again. Did you miss me?
And as the grim hexahedron begins to glide forward, all Yamamoto can think is: It was fate.
Then onyx stone fills his vision, and he knows no more.
Re: Had to pick a Yama/WallmakesteDecember 30 2009, 19:09:16 UTC
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He rounds the corner, and that’s when he smacks into the wall.
I like how the impact still all but KOs him in spite of the fact that this time he was walking at a normal pace. I don't consider it a plot hole, though, because. It's THE WALL. Its natural rapist aura probably drained the life energy right out of him or something.
He goes down hard,
UNF
the somehow-familiar impact reverberating through his bones. The shadow looms closer; he looks up, dazed, and gapes in stunned recognition.
This reveal was so much fun to write. Possibly the most fun I've ever had writing anything.
Towering imposingly before him, the wall is somehow more menacing than ever before, its sleek black surface reflecting, like a mirror, the shocked gaze of the longtime rival who once again lies crumpled before it.The funnest (lol grammar what's that) part of all was trying to come up with different ways to describe the wall. I wanted to paint this bleak, horrific picture, the more over-the-top, the better. Hence, lots of words like IMPOSINGLY and
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Re: Had to pick a Yama/WallmakesteDecember 30 2009, 23:45:01 UTC
See, my logic is, if he could defeat YAMAMOTO FUCKING TAKESHI just by standing there and being a wall, then by God, he must really be ONE HELL OF A WALL, you know? One hell of a mighty godmoding wall. Who apparently likes stalking teenage boys.
In an attempt to cheer myself upnilly_chanDecember 30 2009, 19:01:30 UTC
Let's see what you've got.
No Holds Barrels
When he opens his eyes again, Gokudera is standing there, a little singed from the blast and still reeling a bit from the effects of Attacco di Squalo, but at least still on his feet, which is more than Yamamoto can say for himself. Yamamoto laughs, then stops short with a pained grunt. It feels like he may have bruised a few ribs… but, he thinks with a grin, it was probably worth it.
Re: In an attempt to cheer myself upmakesteDecember 30 2009, 19:33:44 UTC
Heh, I had to go back and reread the surrounding paragraphs for this one first, because there was a lot going on in that fight.
When he opens his eyes again, Gokudera is standing there, a little singed from the blast and still reeling a bit from the effects of Attacco di Squalo, but at least still on his feet, which is more than Yamamoto can say for himself. Yamamoto laughs, then stops short with a pained grunt. It feels like he may have bruised a few ribs… but, he thinks with a grin, it was probably worth it.
Gokudera is feeling so, so smug right at this particular moment that it's not even funny. The whole reason he challenged Yamamoto in the first place was to reestablish his superiority as a fighter and a right hand man candidate (lol, Yama is absolutely right about his making everything into a competition. And in my mind this fic takes place fairly soon after the end of the Future Arc, and while Gokudera was a little familiar with Yamamoto's fighting style and upgrades (having listened in on his rematch with Genkishi), Yama
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Eek, it's a tetch more than 500 words, but I need commentation on this NOW!!
Don't worry, you won't see me complaining. :D Only this might end up going over the comment limit, whoops. Oh well, I can split it up if that's the case.
Taking the Beretta in his right hand, he turns and looks at Yamamoto. Yamamoto just stands there, looking right back.
Do it. That little voice is back again. Shoot him already. Now, while you’ve got the chance.
He raises the gun. Yamamoto doesn’t even blink.This commentary will be kind of interesting because I actually have plans to redo this whole scene (or most of it, anyway) from Yamamoto's POV. The weird thing about this encounter was that Gokudera just happened to have extraordinary timing; any other occasion, and this meeting would have probably ended up being a lot more violent than it turned out to be. I don't think Yamamoto would have killed him, but he probably wouldn't have just let him go either
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And because his confusion is finally beginning to outweigh his anger and even his mistrust, Gokudera just continues to stare back. This is the last thing he anticipated; he expected to face a cold-blooded killer in this alley, not someone like this. Someone who’d actually risk getting shot by letting the would-be shooter go. Someone… almost like Tsuna.
And there's the rub--Gokudera still has a weakness for the Jesus-types. As hard as his own life has been in this 'verse, a part of him still wants to believe in the kind of brighter, optimistic future that Tsuna sort of symbolizes. So when he sees someone do something insanely naive and trusting like this, he can't help but be drawn to it.
Finally, because none of it makes any sense and he can’t think of anything else to do, he asks, “Why?”
Yamamoto just shrugs.
Because the answer is extremely complicated. XD
Leave, the common sense part of Gokudera thinks to himself. Just leave, before reality snaps back in place and he remembers you’re on different fucking sides
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Gokudera frowns. “This is a one-time offer,” he warns.
Yamamoto nods.
“…Good night, Gokudera.”
And off he goes, before he can be tempted to change his mind again.
A moment later, he brushes past Gokudera and walks out of the alley. And Gokudera just stands there.
What the hell just happened?
He should be relieved. Hell, he should be thrilled that one of Vongola’s worst fucking enemies didn’t take him up on possibly the dumbest offer he’s ever made.
But he’s not. Instead he just feels vaguely unsettled and not a little pissed off.
…Shit.
And Gokudera, of course, is still kind of blown away by the whole thing, and very confused by his conflicted feelings about Yamamoto (up till now, he's pretty much been hating the guy from afar, and he really did not expect this up-close-and-personal meeting to screw with things as much as it did). GOD DAMN IT, WHY WAS HE ALMOST NICE, WHY DON'T I WANT TO KILL HIM, AND WHY THE FUCK DOES IT FEEL LIKE SOMETHING'S GONE TERRIBLY WRONG. Sob it's been a very strange night for him
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Some of this is going to be more or less copy-pasted from the commentary on the above scene, but yeah. |D
“Sorry, but you’re going to have to put it down. Or else I’ll make you.”
GOKUDERA SUCKS AT STEALTH, LOL. Yama actually spotted him shortly after he first sat down, but since Gokudera wasn't doing anything shifty, he just kind of let him be because he was more wrapped up in his own problems at the moment. Like I said above, this was actually just after he found out that Enrico had killed his dad :(, so he was busy drowning his sorrows in alcohol. Sort of.
And then he got up and GOKUDERA STARTED FOLLOWING HIM, and he was like, man, fuck this shit. So he double-backed and came up behind Gokudera because dude, what are you doing trying to start trouble when I'm busy angsting over here. No thanks.
The tip of something sharp and blade-shaped pokes into his back to drive the point home. Slowly, all the while berating himself for being such a fucking idiot, Gokudera raises his arms, and reluctantly lets his gun hit the ground with a
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“Huh… I didn’t expect to ever meet you like this,” Yamamoto says out of the blue,
Because it just occurred to him that this is their first meeting, really, the two right hand men of the two rival Vongola bosses. And it is a peculiar setting, there's no doubt about that.
and with a rush, Gokudera recalls the raid and Squalo’s arm and the way this man’s blade had come close, so close to cutting through his beloved boss, and a surge of pure hatred swells through him.
HEY, YEAH, I STILL HATE YOU. >:O!!
Yamamoto smiles faintly. “I guess you’re still mad about that attack on your base, huh?”
Yama's thought process: 1) Damn, he looks pissed. 2) Oh, right, he's probably still mad about that attack. 3) (Say that last part out loud, because my brain-to-mouth filter is very indiscriminating about this kind of thing.) 4) (Smile, which is actually somewhat out-of-character for me in this universe, because in spite of my justified dark and suicidal mood, and despite the fact that this guy's kind of my enemy, I can't help
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Gokudera was expecting something a little more villainy. Like popping a marshmallow in the mouth. Going Kufufufu~ Or trowing a whiskey bottle at someone's head.
This was the coolest one I could think of, which goes to show you how bad I am at coming up with nicknames. But it kind of had that cheesy shounen feel to it. Don't worry, I'm terrible at naming something too. And Shadow Sword is totally fine.
Yama's thought process: Made me snort irl
And I would just like to note that within three lines of dialogue, Gokudera's already managed to coax a smile out of him, which is somewhat amazing and says a lot for how much healthier Yamamoto could be even now if he left Enrico and joined Tsuna's side. God, my heart ;;
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He goes down hard, the somehow-familiar impact reverberating through his bones. The shadow looms closer; he looks up, dazed, and gapes in stunned recognition.
Towering imposingly before him, the wall is somehow more menacing than ever before, its sleek black surface reflecting, like a mirror, the shocked gaze of the longtime rival who once again lies crumpled before it.
As Yamamoto stares in horror, the wall gazes back dispassionately, its rectangular outline leering at him as if to say, Hello again. Did you miss me?
And as the grim hexahedron begins to glide forward, all Yamamoto can think is: It was fate.
Then onyx stone fills his vision, and he knows no more.
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He rounds the corner, and that’s when he smacks into the wall.
I like how the impact still all but KOs him in spite of the fact that this time he was walking at a normal pace. I don't consider it a plot hole, though, because. It's THE WALL. Its natural rapist aura probably drained the life energy right out of him or something.
He goes down hard,
UNF
the somehow-familiar impact reverberating through his bones. The shadow looms closer; he looks up, dazed, and gapes in stunned recognition.
This reveal was so much fun to write. Possibly the most fun I've ever had writing anything.
Towering imposingly before him, the wall is somehow more menacing than ever before, its sleek black surface reflecting, like a mirror, the shocked gaze of the longtime rival who once again lies crumpled before it.The funnest (lol grammar what's that) part of all was trying to come up with different ways to describe the wall. I wanted to paint this bleak, horrific picture, the more over-the-top, the better. Hence, lots of words like IMPOSINGLY and ( ... )
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No Holds Barrels
When he opens his eyes again, Gokudera is standing there, a little singed from the blast and still reeling a bit from the effects of Attacco di Squalo, but at least still on his feet, which is more than Yamamoto can say for himself. Yamamoto laughs, then stops short with a pained grunt. It feels like he may have bruised a few ribs… but, he thinks with a grin, it was probably worth it.
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When he opens his eyes again, Gokudera is standing there, a little singed from the blast and still reeling a bit from the effects of Attacco di Squalo, but at least still on his feet, which is more than Yamamoto can say for himself. Yamamoto laughs, then stops short with a pained grunt. It feels like he may have bruised a few ribs… but, he thinks with a grin, it was probably worth it.
Gokudera is feeling so, so smug right at this particular moment that it's not even funny. The whole reason he challenged Yamamoto in the first place was to reestablish his superiority as a fighter and a right hand man candidate (lol, Yama is absolutely right about his making everything into a competition. And in my mind this fic takes place fairly soon after the end of the Future Arc, and while Gokudera was a little familiar with Yamamoto's fighting style and upgrades (having listened in on his rematch with Genkishi), Yama ( ... )
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Oh, Yamamoto, why so overly nice to Silver-head McGrumpyPants? xD
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BECAUSE HE LOVES HIM. <3 And because he's hilarious. XD
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Taking the Beretta in his right hand, he turns and looks at Yamamoto. Yamamoto just stands there, looking right back ( ... )
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Don't worry, you won't see me complaining. :D Only this might end up going over the comment limit, whoops. Oh well, I can split it up if that's the case.
Taking the Beretta in his right hand, he turns and looks at Yamamoto. Yamamoto just stands there, looking right back.
Do it. That little voice is back again. Shoot him already. Now, while you’ve got the chance.
He raises the gun. Yamamoto doesn’t even blink.This commentary will be kind of interesting because I actually have plans to redo this whole scene (or most of it, anyway) from Yamamoto's POV. The weird thing about this encounter was that Gokudera just happened to have extraordinary timing; any other occasion, and this meeting would have probably ended up being a lot more violent than it turned out to be. I don't think Yamamoto would have killed him, but he probably wouldn't have just let him go either ( ... )
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And there's the rub--Gokudera still has a weakness for the Jesus-types. As hard as his own life has been in this 'verse, a part of him still wants to believe in the kind of brighter, optimistic future that Tsuna sort of symbolizes. So when he sees someone do something insanely naive and trusting like this, he can't help but be drawn to it.
Finally, because none of it makes any sense and he can’t think of anything else to do, he asks, “Why?”
Yamamoto just shrugs.
Because the answer is extremely complicated. XD
Leave, the common sense part of Gokudera thinks to himself. Just leave, before reality snaps back in place and he remembers you’re on different fucking sides ( ... )
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“I can’t.”
Gokudera frowns. “This is a one-time offer,” he warns.
Yamamoto nods.
“…Good night, Gokudera.”
And off he goes, before he can be tempted to change his mind again.
A moment later, he brushes past Gokudera and walks out of the alley. And Gokudera just stands there.
What the hell just happened?
He should be relieved. Hell, he should be thrilled that one of Vongola’s worst fucking enemies didn’t take him up on possibly the dumbest offer he’s ever made.
But he’s not. Instead he just feels vaguely unsettled and not a little pissed off.
…Shit.
And Gokudera, of course, is still kind of blown away by the whole thing, and very confused by his conflicted feelings about Yamamoto (up till now, he's pretty much been hating the guy from afar, and he really did not expect this up-close-and-personal meeting to screw with things as much as it did). GOD DAMN IT, WHY WAS HE ALMOST NICE, WHY DON'T I WANT TO KILL HIM, AND WHY THE FUCK DOES IT FEEL LIKE SOMETHING'S GONE TERRIBLY WRONG. Sob it's been a very strange night for him ( ... )
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“Sorry, but you’re going to have to put it down. Or else I’ll make you.”
GOKUDERA SUCKS AT STEALTH, LOL. Yama actually spotted him shortly after he first sat down, but since Gokudera wasn't doing anything shifty, he just kind of let him be because he was more wrapped up in his own problems at the moment. Like I said above, this was actually just after he found out that Enrico had killed his dad :(, so he was busy drowning his sorrows in alcohol. Sort of.
And then he got up and GOKUDERA STARTED FOLLOWING HIM, and he was like, man, fuck this shit. So he double-backed and came up behind Gokudera because dude, what are you doing trying to start trouble when I'm busy angsting over here. No thanks.
The tip of something sharp and blade-shaped pokes into his back to drive the point home. Slowly, all the while berating himself for being such a fucking idiot, Gokudera raises his arms, and reluctantly lets his gun hit the ground with a ( ... )
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“Huh… I didn’t expect to ever meet you like this,” Yamamoto says out of the blue,
Because it just occurred to him that this is their first meeting, really, the two right hand men of the two rival Vongola bosses. And it is a peculiar setting, there's no doubt about that.
and with a rush, Gokudera recalls the raid and Squalo’s arm and the way this man’s blade had come close, so close to cutting through his beloved boss, and a surge of pure hatred swells through him.
HEY, YEAH, I STILL HATE YOU. >:O!!
Yamamoto smiles faintly. “I guess you’re still mad about that attack on your base, huh?”
Yama's thought process: 1) Damn, he looks pissed. 2) Oh, right, he's probably still mad about that attack. 3) (Say that last part out loud, because my brain-to-mouth filter is very indiscriminating about this kind of thing.) 4) (Smile, which is actually somewhat out-of-character for me in this universe, because in spite of my justified dark and suicidal mood, and despite the fact that this guy's kind of my enemy, I can't help ( ... )
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Amen.
Gokudera was expecting something a little more villainy.
Like popping a marshmallow in the mouth. Going Kufufufu~ Or trowing a whiskey bottle at someone's head.
This was the coolest one I could think of, which goes to show you how bad I am at coming up with nicknames. But it kind of had that cheesy shounen feel to it.
Don't worry, I'm terrible at naming something too. And Shadow Sword is totally fine.
Yama's thought process: Made me snort irl
And I would just like to note that within three lines of dialogue, Gokudera's already managed to coax a smile out of him, which is somewhat amazing and says a lot for how much healthier Yamamoto could be even now if he left Enrico and joined Tsuna's side.
God, my heart ;;
I'm gonna re-read the whole thing now. ;;
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