Week Three - Third Comment
Another heritage poet comment:
http://lifeissweet09.livejournal.com/4028.html?view=3516#t3516
good effort Thedora!!!
Hey Thedora
I LOVED your poem, really I did. You drew me into your world and really captivated me with the intracies of your family life and your heritage. There is certainly pride in your words and I think you have every right!
My favourite parts of your poem would have to be:
From my dad sadly I get his temper
Mix it with my mum's stubborn mood
Would I yell at somebody...never
Unless you touch my food
and
Here's a glimpse of the past
Of how my dad proposed to my mum
Together they both brought rings
Went to church and said their prayers
And right there and then my dad slipped the ring-
onto her dainty fingers... we all know what she said
Your natural sense of humour and your ability to create a picture are wonderful and really come through in your writing. You should be so proud of the effort you made in writing it! - I would be!
Have a fabulous week and hope to run into you sometime soon!
Liz