Fic:When you Tell my Story, Don't Forget Me 6/6
Part Five
[You just don't want to watch me die]
Seeing you like this, After so Many Years
Beloved Father, Poet, Friend
1885 - 1958
Anna stared down at the gravestone, as still as a statue. She had missed his death, avoided his illness, ignored his funeral, abandoned his gravestone… she had let him die in peace. (Though she was haunted by the last words he spoke to her, “You just don’t ( Read more... )
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Wow. This is one of the most stunning stories I have ever read ( ... )
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Bless you.
I think I broke into hives when I read this. Thank you SO much for reading and commenting and I am truly glad that you enjoyed this. It wasn't an easy piece to write.
please forgive the fact that this review will be a fail
Everything you are is full of win. Do not apologize, thank you for taking the time to comment at all!!!
I am not a crier, I am just not. Well the first tears threatened during the prologue and as soon as I got to part two I was pathetically done for.
*hands tissue*
Your phrasing is utterly gorgeous. I couldn't say what you're doing exactly
Thank you. I have genuine concern that my style (especially in this piece) is hard to connect with - so I'm glad that it worked for you.
I kept wondering whether the poems where meant as a formal expression of that existential loss Ah, the poetry. I added them for many reasons - primarily because Anna is a WOC - and I am not. And so much of Anna/Pearl's story is intrinsically tied to the fact that they ( ... )
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YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL TO ME.
Mostly it was to remind myself/the reader - that there ARE thousands of Chinese women with their own stories .... what I love about Anna and Pearl, is that they are Ancient: they are tied to every story - I tried to make them the Chinese version of the (Western) Petrova-doppelganger: female figures that are stagnant throughout time and represent an entire wealth of stories on their bodies.
GOD I LOVE THIS SO MUCH. They are tied to every story /dies dies dies
You have no idea how much I needed this story, honestly. It's more than kink-fulfilling, this is the cathartic read I have been craving for months (ever since I read pleasebekidding's stunning Isobel-break-my-fucking-heart big bang--which you should def read if you haven't). I'm ( ... )
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You know, I think the fact that it came so naturally (if I can say that--it's not the best way to put it)
It was very organic - I'm a wacky writer that listens to my characters implicitly. Shen being in love with Anna was an original idea - the reason for this story was that premise. And Abuse: Anna -> Shen was always the point. Shen's darkness was a delightful surprise. I say "delightful" in that - - - it makes sense.
And you captured that with much needed sensitivity. /vomits
*heavy sigh of relief*
LOL at our love being already gross. I LOVE IT I LOVE IT. *loves*
*g* WE ARE TERRIBLE *loves*
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Oh, poor Shen. And poor Anna. Poor both of them. They were both victims of her nature, something she never asked for.
(“A complex look at a cycle of parental abuse through the narrative trope of vampirism.”)
OH MY HEART.
Someday I won’t be so afraid. Someday I will be capable of living to the fullness that you did. Someday I will not be haunted by the memory of you and your hand over my mouth, of your frail body wrapped in my arms as I sang you to sleep. Someday the nightmares will end. Someday the hazy memories of my own mortality will become as solid as you once were - or will fade away. Someday it will all become clear.
As she walked away into the dusk, preparing for the coming storm, her shoulders pressed into the wind, she avoided the thoughts she couldn’t speak aloud; only secretly hoping that she could finally stop running. (Wouldn’t that be a miracle?)OH KELSEY. This was amazing. This mix of ( ... )
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Yes. Yes yes yes. ((but more about her - since he published her story as his own - but also about him))
Y O U
Gah. I'm not sure what else to say except that this was a fic-reading experience unlike any other I've had before, and thank you so much for sharing it with me.
*sniffles*
I'm not sure what to say in response to this. Thank you so so so so SO much for reading this. It - I'm so disturbingly proud of it.
I almost feel like you could take this an expand it and turn it into a novel if you wanted
(I've seriously considered this - but I love it how it is so much - and where it is. I think any expansion would require months of research into Chinese cultural history.)
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