"And No Birds Sing," the commentary

Aug 24, 2008 18:31

A couple people asked for a commentary on "Birds," my really official first Tin Man fic. It's Ambrose/the Queen, present tense, and I refused to use proper names. So here goes:

'O, what can ail thee, knight-at-arms' )

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lionille August 25 2008, 03:39:37 UTC
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I adored this fic the first time around, and the second time with your commentary had made me love it more!

It starts off so chaste and just keeps that sort of innocence. And I love the dangling feet!

I loved the way it started off so chastely too, it was so in keeping with their personalities. And the feet! ^^

"Ageless Light" shout out! And no, I have no idea who says what. Read it however you like.

Whee! Shout out! ^^ And I totally loved how for just that little exchange you could imagine either saying either part.

A pen is perched over his left ear and she almost smiles at the glint of silver peaking out of his curls [U c whut I did thar?]

OMG.... I totally missed that! How did I miss that? Genius foreshadowing! *shivers*

She is proud, noble, and unafraid on this silent morning [...and no birds sing],

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kseda August 25 2008, 14:49:00 UTC
Eee! *glomps*

I loved the way it started off so chastely too, it was so in keeping with their personalities. And the feet! ^^

Propriety must be adhered to and all that... until the very very very last minute. And that mental picture of Ambrose curled up on a dainty lady's chaise (I'm thinking like this), snugged in a hand-sewn quilt with his feetsies sticking out just KILLS me. :D

Whee! Shout out! ^^ And I totally loved how for just that little exchange you could imagine either saying either part.

I just HAD to. I was thinking "Where's a good palce for Ozian booze- OH!" And after reading it over a zillion times I think it's him-her-him-her, but I may be wrong.

OMG.... I totally missed that! How did I miss that? Genius foreshadowing! *shivers**flail* The pen thing needed to be worked back in, and it's just a subtle "Oh NO" moment. Also it's that line in particular that's making me want to do some sort of post-series sequel. *facepalm ( ... )

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luchia13 August 25 2008, 04:20:28 UTC
I was juuuuuuust about to go request this. It is LOVERLY. I enjoy the self-indulgence, I really, really do. You make it sound even more swanky that it was before. ♥

Except: the glint of silver peaking out of his curls. Unless you meant, like...popping up. In which case ignore me.

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kseda August 25 2008, 04:40:40 UTC
Yay swank! *dances* I am glad my showing-off of ego pleases you.

...freaking homonyms *fixes, like, WAY LATE*

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luchia13 August 25 2008, 04:43:45 UTC
And not Hillary Swank. The good sort of swank.

We should totally have a Who Needs Grammar day. Everyone would intentionally write HORRIBLY.

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oddsbobs August 25 2008, 05:55:35 UTC
!!!

How is it you can make me love you more?

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kseda August 25 2008, 14:49:24 UTC
It's my other superpower *clings!*

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oddsbobs August 25 2008, 18:18:16 UTC
wait, you have more than one? *is jealous*

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koslorollo August 25 2008, 19:59:11 UTC
Damn that was interesting. Your self indulgences are interesting! How do you do it...

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kseda August 26 2008, 16:41:12 UTC
I honestly have no idea. Some cross between Doctor Who fandom's obsession with personal canon and my love of my own "clevernes" probably does it.

So glad you enjoyed!

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eleanor_ariail August 27 2008, 17:50:33 UTC
I never had any idea the brandy&vapors part was meant to be read either way. I always read it as A-brandy, Q-vapors. Cause he probably thought he was being sooo rebellious by wanting the brandy, and then she shows him up wishing for street drugs. Oh, Queen, you really are fiesty.

Fun commentary!

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kseda August 27 2008, 18:06:23 UTC
Bwaha! Yeah, I think you're right. I try to make it ambiguous but they're so very transparent, which is partly why I randomly ship them so hard *sigh*

Thanks for reading over my self-congratulatory squee!

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eleanor_ariail August 27 2008, 18:30:56 UTC
It's not transparent, it's in-character!

Hee, it's nice to be self-indulgent sometimes! I think I will copy this meme, myself.

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