*sigh*

[elizabethfaye09]

Title: Lie
Author: me
Rating: pg-13 cuz they have potty mouth's!
Disclaimer: i own nothing. the title and lyrics in the story are "Lie" by David Cook
Author's Notes: so this little...THING started out as what was going to be five different drabbles for for five different words. the first was called LIE but then it spawned into this almost 4500-word

Comments

[blakvalentyne]

I absolutely loved this. Realistic and full of tension. Just amazing.

The dream killed me on the inside. It was so sad and I admit, I got scared! An end to Kradam is too awful for me to think about and for you to have it in print, with great desciption and grammar nearly had me in tears. I'm not much of a sap, but you truly got to me.

And just saying, I've never liked the whole "You" POV but I actually liked it here :)

[elizabethfaye09]

oh, wow. thank you!

i kinda don't like the you POV much either but i actually find things (for me) written better in that POV. things just seem to flow more naturally and easily. but thanks for being honest about it :)

and definitely thanks for leaving such a nice comment and actually taking the time to read this :)

[joannacullen]

I really enjoyed this. I love fic that really gets inside the characters heads. I thought it was really believable and beautifully written. The POV is not one often used, nor does it often work well - but it works wonderfully here!

My favorite line: “I know,” you kiss his cheek where a tear clings to a freckle, “I know.”

Seriously?!?! I mean, SERIOUSLY! That description is so gorgeous and unexpected. The whole thing - really great work. :)

[elizabethfaye09]

thank you so much! yeah, i know what you mean by this pov doesn't usually work well. im glad it worked here though! *whew* lol.

thank you!

[blaqkheaven]

Cute... I don't usually like 2nd person, but this was cool. :) Also, Kris <3's Adam's thighs... haha.

[elizabethfaye09]

haha thank you :)

[elizabethfaye09]

thanks! :)

[rollerspoopers]

i loved it!wohoo-i hoped that the make-up-sex will be in the next chapter soon!

[elizabethfaye09]

thanks. im not sure if i'll do a continuation. if i do then it'll be a while lol. thank you for commenting :)