FIRST of all, I want to apologize for sounding like a total and complete idiot last night. x.x; I misworded what I said, so pardon my stupidity on that part
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The writing itself isn't remarkable in either way, but its facts are kind of screwed up. Like how Zexion managed to survive & everything after that; kind of a load of bull.
It's not the Gary Stu-ness of it, really, but that his great getaway was so unimaginative, oh yeah he opened a portal and ran for it, let's not consider that he controls illusions, could've been a better way to go at it.
And, well, not just Zexion himself but that friggin' family of nobodywhatevers! There were nobodies...and then they turned into Dusks aka nobodies?? The hell is that? And then Zexion apparently didn't know they were nobodies at first, not to mention the improbability of a whole family becoming human-form-retaining nobodies that turned into Dusks for no real reason.
But yeah, his characterization. He's rather woobie, in an emo way, which is bothersome because it's explicitly stated that he's a pretty callous, don't-care-about-my-comrades'-welfare kinda guy.
Ooh I should shut up right about now; this is so long :(
Yeah, agreed~ The oh so common portal isn't such a great way of resolving it.
Plus, you're right; why would human shaped nobodies turn into dusks just because they couldn't find hearts? A bit out there, honestly...
And Zexion + angst just isn't right at all. As I said, the way he's written reminds me too much of Cloud, sorta. And why cigarettes? o.o Sure, I can see Xigbar smoking, but Zex? Seems a bit odd to me. -shrug-
And don't worry about long replies; I'm cool with it. Insight is always a good thing~
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The writing itself isn't remarkable in either way, but its facts are kind of screwed up. Like how Zexion managed to survive & everything after that; kind of a load of bull.
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And, yeah, prose isn't great either, but at least it's not chocked full of grammar errors. .-.
I was really sugar coated in my review because I don't want to suffer the wrath of an angry author. >.>
But, really, in all of FF.net, there are only two good Zex/Kairi fics. Kinda a bummer, cuz it CAN work~ :X
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And, well, not just Zexion himself but that friggin' family of nobodywhatevers! There were nobodies...and then they turned into Dusks aka nobodies?? The hell is that? And then Zexion apparently didn't know they were nobodies at first, not to mention the improbability of a whole family becoming human-form-retaining nobodies that turned into Dusks for no real reason.
But yeah, his characterization. He's rather woobie, in an emo way, which is bothersome because it's explicitly stated that he's a pretty callous, don't-care-about-my-comrades'-welfare kinda guy.
Ooh I should shut up right about now; this is so long :(
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Plus, you're right; why would human shaped nobodies turn into dusks just because they couldn't find hearts? A bit out there, honestly...
And Zexion + angst just isn't right at all. As I said, the way he's written reminds me too much of Cloud, sorta. And why cigarettes? o.o Sure, I can see Xigbar smoking, but Zex? Seems a bit odd to me. -shrug-
And don't worry about long replies; I'm cool with it. Insight is always a good thing~
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