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kebencaruso

Learn To Knock

Jun 19, 2013 22:06

Title: Learn To knock
Pairing: Jalex
Rating: NC-17
POV: Jack
Summary: "Without any hope of finding a partner, I gave up and slid my hand through the waistband of my boxers and tried to get a good grip of my leaking dick."
Disclaimer: I don't own anyone in this fanfic. Honestly. Only the plot line is mine. :) This never happened.
WARNING: sexiness, ( Read more... )

top!alex, top!jack, pairing: jalex

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atlaregay June 20 2013, 16:42:17 UTC

No such thing as too much foreplay, silly.

I have some pointers for writing better smut, if you would like? This has a lot of potential. xo

kebencaruso June 20 2013, 23:49:53 UTC

Yes please. That would be so much help! I really need it. I really dont have an idea on what i was doing. but, hey. it's my first time. :) pointers would be a really good help. Thank you.

atlaregay June 21 2013, 03:00:48 UTC

Okay! I don't mean any of this to be insulting, just constructive criticism ( ... )

kebencaruso June 21 2013, 03:36:27 UTC

Oh my god. Thank you! :) I guess I'll edit this now, try to make it better. Thank you so much!!! This really helped, you have no idea. Thank you. I'll make it better. I hope.. But i'll try. Thank you! :) Yeah there's so many grammar/spelling mistakes, I wrote it on wattpad and just posted it here. Sorry for that. But, I can't thank you enough for helping me. I hope I get better. I really have no idea what I was doing. But thanks :)

I'll post it right away once finished. :) And again, Thank you so much.

atlaregay June 23 2013, 03:27:40 UTC

You're really welcome, haha ( ... )

kebencaruso June 23 2013, 04:20:20 UTC

Oh. Okay.. :) I guess americanaffair offered her/himself to be my BETA. She's(i'll just address her as SHE) really sweet and her fics are good. :) i kinda like Merrikat. Maybe I could try and write some of it. And, idek what i was thinking coz tomorrow's my first day of school and a story came in my mind, like, jalex incest.. i kinda like it. :) I dont know.

No, i've read your jalex fics :) They're amazing. That's why i added you as a friend coz I saw most of your fics and i liked it so much. Honestly, at first you were an ATL hater coz your username is, like, atlaregay, but i saw your fics and they're amazing. Tbh, (call me a perv) but it actually turned me on. XD

Oh well.. Uhm, one more question, can I have more than one BETA?

Thank you again so much for helping me. Really. I wont let you down. :)

atlaregay June 23 2013, 18:29:18 UTC

Ah, americanaffair (I believe it's she) is an AMAZING writer. She's not afraid to venture into a world of fetishes and kinks for her writing and I love that. She'll be a good BETA for you ( ... )

kebencaruso June 23 2013, 04:27:45 UTC

my favorite actually is No More Waiting :) and Where Do You Get Off, Making Noises. You Scared. Teasing To Please and Sex It All Better. Haha. I saved it on my phone so I can read it whenever I feel upset. :) it's working btw :) You're really awesome at wht you're doing. I hope you make more. :) Please. Haha. Thanks! :)

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