She's So Heavy (I Want You)

[katany]

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2. Just Waiting to Hear from You

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The Doctor pressed his hand tightly to his forehead to stave off his headache. The gesture did little to relieve the throbbing behind his eyes and through his forehead. He deserved far worse than a migraine. That punishment was reserved for his hearts.

He liked humans and humans, even

Comments

[katany]

Thanks for reviewing again.

I've been thinking about what you've said about being confused with the timelines and I realized this might be a problem with my story when I was writing it. I knew this was going to be my hardest chapter because not only because I was using Leela, but was I changing gears on people. To complicate things, I really liked my first chapter and found other people were interested as well (hence the apology at the start). I was going to explain this all at the end, but I bumped up what I can without giving away the ending.

I've been told in the past I sometimes don't build enough of a foundation for my more experimental stories. I think I've got an idea to help set this up in chapter 1. I'll probably fix it by the time I post chapter 3. Sadly it's just one of the drawbacks for me when I'm posting a WIP. I added a summary too and end notes if it helps.

I think where Leela sounds off is where I use her to drop plot points for people whom haven't seen the episode. I had longer dialog for this first, but it really hurt the pace of the piece and I got frustrated. Later I might work on this more.

You tend to bring plot interests I don't see in my own work and I really appreciate that. It makes me want to explore these first two chapters more. I might spin off these two chapters into their own stories. But please forgive me for not completing them in this story. But this story is about the choices the Doctor makes after he receives the call and the potential consequences for Sarah (and the final choice this Doctor makes) and I hope it's as interesting.