I love the description in this part. The description of the picture of Louis' children in the hammock was 'picture perfect'. It reminded me vividly of sharing a hammock with my younger sisters and brother in Rockport out on the deck. I fell in love with his family in that moment.
Louis' conflict with his ex-wife and how he did (or didn't) handle it rang quite true. Often even if you know you're right, you don't want to go full throttle in a battle with your ex. Partly because you don't want your children caught up in the fight, partly because however badly it ended at some point there was enough there to love, get married and have children. You captured perfectly the awfulness of battling in the wreckage of a marriage.
Thanks! The fight between Louis and Susannah was a hard one to write. They were both so hurt and shocked and angry, and I really didn't want to make either one of them into a black hat, but neither of them handled it perfectly, either. Even though I'm not sure how much love in the romantic sense there really was between the two--I'm thinking it was a lot of guilt/responsibility and friendship--they still did mean something to each other.
Ah. Have a bit of time, and can actually comment publicly and non-beta-y. I really, really love the scene with Susannah and Louis here. It's so ouchy, and mainly because you didn't make Susannah a total villain. I mean, what she's doing is wrong, but she's not doing it for evil. And what's worse, under all the anger and tension and brokenness, you can see where they really did once care for each other. It's such a realistic portrayal of a divorced couple, where it's a broken life and a broken dream that they're sharing
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I felt bad for everyone in that scene with Susannah, but I really felt bad for Jude in all of this. He's willing to stay by Louis's side if he's going to fight for them, but he knows enough about what he wants out of life and Louis is to leave.
Exactly! It is infuriating, but like you said, it fits as Louis's weakness. In some ways, it's a good weakness for Felix's partner to have, since Felix isn't so good about self-preservation. But on the other hand, his enabling allows Felix to preserve some idealistic fantasies that really *should* be shattered...it was an interesting mix. Maybe that was even something that drew Felix to Louis at first.
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Louis' conflict with his ex-wife and how he did (or didn't) handle it rang quite true. Often even if you know you're right, you don't want to go full throttle in a battle with your ex. Partly because you don't want your children caught up in the fight, partly because however badly it ended at some point there was enough there to love, get married and have children. You captured perfectly the awfulness of battling in the wreckage of a marriage.
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I can't wait to read part 2!
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Thanks!
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I felt bad for everyone in that scene with Susannah, but I really felt bad for Jude in all of this. He's willing to stay by Louis's side if he's going to fight for them, but he knows enough about what he wants out of life and Louis is to leave.
Exactly! It is infuriating, but like you said, it fits as Louis's weakness. In some ways, it's a good weakness for Felix's partner to have, since Felix isn't so good about self-preservation. But on the other hand, his enabling allows Felix to preserve some idealistic fantasies that really *should* be shattered...it was an interesting mix. Maybe that was even something that drew Felix to Louis at first.
Anyway, thanks so much for commenting! :)
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