Ah. Have a bit of time, and can actually comment publicly and non-beta-y. I really, really love the scene with Susannah and Louis here. It's so ouchy, and mainly because you didn't make Susannah a total villain. I mean, what she's doing is wrong, but she's not doing it for evil. And what's worse, under all the anger and tension and brokenness, you can see where they really did once care for each other. It's such a realistic portrayal of a divorced couple, where it's a broken life and a broken dream that they're sharing.
And then Jude... while I know I pushed you on others later, Jude is perfect. Because he's standing right there when Louis gets that blow... Jude's reaction is so right.
I also really like the present, although in ways I want to strangle Louis. His big defining flaw of overprotecting Felix and bordering on codependency is one that just sets my teeth on edge in real life, but strikes me as extremely canon, given that he's handing off illegal morpha shots to his boyfriend. This isn't a critique at all- it makes Louis very human to me- it's just very vivid and very... HIM. and yet, it fits very well with Felix and his idealistic blindness, and his determination here to think that if he'd been leading the mutiny, it would have been almost entirely bloodless.
Very, very lovely, but you know how much i love this fic :)
I felt bad for everyone in that scene with Susannah, but I really felt bad for Jude in all of this. He's willing to stay by Louis's side if he's going to fight for them, but he knows enough about what he wants out of life and Louis is to leave.
Exactly! It is infuriating, but like you said, it fits as Louis's weakness. In some ways, it's a good weakness for Felix's partner to have, since Felix isn't so good about self-preservation. But on the other hand, his enabling allows Felix to preserve some idealistic fantasies that really *should* be shattered...it was an interesting mix. Maybe that was even something that drew Felix to Louis at first.
And then Jude... while I know I pushed you on others later, Jude is perfect. Because he's standing right there when Louis gets that blow... Jude's reaction is so right.
I also really like the present, although in ways I want to strangle Louis. His big defining flaw of overprotecting Felix and bordering on codependency is one that just sets my teeth on edge in real life, but strikes me as extremely canon, given that he's handing off illegal morpha shots to his boyfriend. This isn't a critique at all- it makes Louis very human to me- it's just very vivid and very... HIM. and yet, it fits very well with Felix and his idealistic blindness, and his determination here to think that if he'd been leading the mutiny, it would have been almost entirely bloodless.
Very, very lovely, but you know how much i love this fic :)
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I felt bad for everyone in that scene with Susannah, but I really felt bad for Jude in all of this. He's willing to stay by Louis's side if he's going to fight for them, but he knows enough about what he wants out of life and Louis is to leave.
Exactly! It is infuriating, but like you said, it fits as Louis's weakness. In some ways, it's a good weakness for Felix's partner to have, since Felix isn't so good about self-preservation. But on the other hand, his enabling allows Felix to preserve some idealistic fantasies that really *should* be shattered...it was an interesting mix. Maybe that was even something that drew Felix to Louis at first.
Anyway, thanks so much for commenting! :)
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