[fic] Cruel Intentions: Retribution Three

[kajornwan]

Title: Retribution Three
Rating: PG-13
Warning: Major angst + Tragedy
Characters: Fei Long, Alexei, Yoh
Spoiler: Spoiler for NT arc
Disclaimer: All characters belong to YA sensei.
Beta: angel0399
Previous Chapters: On the side bar of my lj kajornwan

TRANSLATIONS UPDATE: CI (first arc) is now being translated into Polish by yoan_chan *hugs*. The first chapter is finished

Comments

[portisheart]

ow. the end cut my breath for a while, so inexpected.. you'd be a brilliant playwright for tv series - when a chara has become obsolete, something terrible just happens to them.. zap! well, you managed to produce a great *gasp* effect! xD
so many questions arising: who ordered the gunning of the penthouse and how did they know about its occupants? why is Yoh around, anyway? how will Mik react to his brother's death? what'll happen to Fei Long's haven of peace, just offered but already distroyed, which even if he kept it is now tainted by the tragic end of Alex? what am i going to eat for lunch? xDD

thx for the ride, and though i'm not in the habit of pressing ppl for updates, this chapter srsly needs answers *soon* ^_^

[kajornwan]

Oh, I happen to think I might do much better as a playwright. Considering that I see these scenes in my head like movies (with soundtracks mind you) anyway, plus my lack of writing skills and laziness in describing such movie scenes in my head would agree with me. If I could draw that well I'd never write, if I could make movies I'd never draw. XD I love dialogs and I love roller coaster plots, but all those details in between, well, I suck big time as you can see

[portisheart]

yeah right.. you and no writing skills, sucking etc *snort*. i'll kindly inform you that i've seen far worse writing and plotting in many of those m/m ebooks i'm dl everywhere! ^^
me too i'd love to make movies.. *sigh*. this said, try to find a real 3D fei Long worth his 2D counterpart.. might take months of scanning the best model agencies in china or the next asian countries..

i must be the absolute one-paragraph killer-writer! maybe i should start writing one-paragraph fics instead of the ones lying halfwritten and dusty in my pc fanfic folder - at least this'd satisfy my addiction to procrastination XDDD
well, the honor of writing your summary would be entirely mine ^^.

ruining everyone's life.. okaaaay. now i really wonder and cringe!
but as this still is a m/m fic, don't make the angst too "bottomless" - pun intended

[kajornwan]

Well, writing is hard for me, truly. I often feel suffocated and frustrated when trying to write the scenes in my head that i have in such big details and my words don't seem to do them justice. Movies would have been best!! XD But yeah, finding actors would be so hard. Solution is to just do 3D animation XD''

Actually, you are the absolute one-paragraph killer. I keep wanting to read your fics after seeing how beautifully you write in your comments but I have no time to read much these days. *Cries* I've missed so many Fei fics lately and it's such a crime *kicks self*

but as this still is a m/m fic, don't make the angst too "bottomless" - pun intended ~
LOL I will try, though I still don't see an opening in this arc at this point (pun-intended)T_T

[juninunmul]

Re: T_T

[kajornwan]

You're right. I just had to do that! But if it's any consolation, I am T_T too. I already miss him, badly. But his untimely death opens a lot of doors for this fic to progress, and he must make the sacrifice *hugs him*

Thank you for commenting too.

[alexolgicant]

Why did you kill him? Keep going, please update soon.

[kajornwan]

Well, someone has to die in all my fics. If not Alexei, it would have been Mikhail or Fei! Updates might take longer now because the next chapter is most difficult to write. But I shall try. Thank you so much for commenting.

NOOOOOOOOO

[sliad]

You kill Alexei when I just started to love him. 5555555555555555555555555555555555555555555

Re: NOOOOOOOOO

[kajornwan]

That was actually the point *gets shot*. I'm partially regretting not giving him a chance to be loved more before killing him really.But I hope to be able to do some one shots or backstory on him later. Thank you for being here and telling me how you like him ^_^

[char_comet]

OH MY!!! You didn't have to do even this *sigh* You really are someone who enjoys to torture people with angst XD I hope you didn't enyoy yourself while writing such painful things.....(?)

Fei already was living with the burden of being responsible of his father's death, now you even had to condemn him to live with the burden of Alexei's death (I suppose Fei Long thinks it was himself the real and main target) and Mikhail's almost suicide with drugs.

And I am really sad for Alexei himself cause I liked him for not cheating on Fei Long anymore but loving him as a friend or as a lover... or even as the lover of his brother.
Have we reached the peak of the tragedy or there's even more?

[kajornwan]

I can't deny that I do love to torture my characters, as you know, but you will not see me joke about this. I'm enjoying crying my head off for Alexei, and the fact that I will not get to write him with Fei again is such a great loss to me really. But unless I changed my mind later, this is the event I need to be able to give Mik and Fei a somewhat happy ending. Hopefully by the end of this arc something bad does not happen to me to urge me to write a complete greek tragedy!

And yes, Fei is already stricken with guilt over his father, now he will guilt over Alexei's death, and Mikhail's drug overdose. On the other hand, do not forget what Mikhail is going through and where and with whom Alexei was found dead. If you ask me, I'm actually doing this more to torture Mikhail actually, and if it's any consolation, Fei will have to be the one to pull him out of that hell.

I'm glad you are sad for Alexei as I am. I love him a lot, truly.

Have we reached the peak of the tragedy or there's even more?On the scale of 1-10, I would say about

[char_comet]

Have we reached the peak of the tragedy or there's even more?
On the scale of 1-10, I would say about 6.

And honestly tell me...do you think that us already poor deprived Fei Long's (and Mikhail's XD) fans could deserve even such a punishment?!?

[baby_fei]

Think of it this way, if I don't do this, there's no way I can drag the fic along long enough for Mik and Fei to reappear again just to save my life!! Cracks and romantic stuffs don't last over a few chapters by my incompetent hands! T_T And its not punishment, the more they get hurt, the stronger their love becomes!!!