gyugafgyuajossiebabyahhFebruary 17 2010, 06:46:34 UTC
I actually wrote this story about a year ago. It's a short story or one shot as i like to call it. No, shes not a foreigner in the story and to me it doesn't really matter if she is but i guess to the readers it does.
When i wrote this i wasnt going for a whole fanfic plot and all. i wanted to write something uncommon to society. to me this is pretty uncommon. Jaejoong is korean and shes mixed. i think race is not a big factor here. whats a big factor is that they were both humans with simple human emotions and i wanted to capture that.
i know is not the best of writing and im not the best writer but i try and i guess thats what matters the most.
thank you very much for reading my story and i hope you liked it!!!!!!!!
i love criticism even though it hurts me in the end. hehehehehe
Re: gyugafgyuaraynbowzebraFebruary 17 2010, 22:59:13 UTC
B+
Don't be hurt by my words, you didn't do anything wrong. It was just very artistic, and when you go for artistic styles you tend to lose some people (like me).
Re: gyugafgyuaraynbowzebraFebruary 18 2010, 03:23:55 UTC
I thought so.
I especially hate when you get sites that won't take them, like you write them in but they end up disappearing on you when you post it, whats up with that?!
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It's a short story or one shot as i like to call it. No, shes not a foreigner in the story and to me it doesn't really matter if she is but i guess to the readers it does.
When i wrote this i wasnt going for a whole fanfic plot and all. i wanted to write something uncommon to society. to me this is pretty uncommon. Jaejoong is korean and shes mixed. i think race is not a big factor here. whats a big factor is that they were both humans with simple human emotions and i wanted to capture that.
i know is not the best of writing and im not the best writer but i try and i guess thats what matters the most.
thank you very much for reading my story and i hope you liked it!!!!!!!!
i love criticism even though it hurts me in the end. hehehehehe
what grade would you give this story?
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Don't be hurt by my words, you didn't do anything wrong. It was just very artistic, and when you go for artistic styles you tend to lose some people (like me).
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I'm just overly sensitive. I am majoring in Creative Writing afterall.
But overall i think the story went good.
i hate quotation marks.
-_-
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I especially hate when you get sites that won't take them, like you write them in but they end up disappearing on you when you post it, whats up with that?!
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i bet they were thinking "well, i hate quotations so im gonna anger all who dont."
scary. evilness.
ahh
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