Lost Memories Part 4

[joryx666]

Owen walks over to Jack and hands him a cold wash cloth. "His face is getting darker. just place this on his forehead."

Jack puts the cloth on Ianto's forehead and kisses him. "don't you go to sleep now. will you” he looks over at Tosh “Tosh go and see the pilot again and ask him to radio for an ambulance to meet us straight away, and ask how long

Comments

[chyldeofnyte]

I have been trying to hang on reading this as the story was intriguing, but your writing style is a great turn off. Please use proper capitalization, and drop the 'l33t' or text speak. If you are serious enough about writing then be serious enough to spell out the words. Your greatest distractions so far to me are using u for you, ur for you're, and the contraction for I will which is I'll not the word ill.

[joryx666]

i'm glad that you are reading it. i know i have to stop wrighting like that. the thing is its all role play and my friend is the one wrighting like that. but im the one wrighting ill instead of I'll. i have to read through it more carfully because i've gotten use to it looking like that. If only spell check would pick up the letter u as misspelled i think it would be easier.