Forgive Me: Onew/Key; NC-17, part 1

[jinkibumiminho]

Title: Forgive Me
Author: mimi_oly
Rating: NC-17 (for theme, explicit sexual content)
Pairing/Focus: Onew/Key
Word count: 8200
Genre: Drama, smut
Summary: Jinki comes home drunk and takes what he wants from Kibum. There are repercussions for this violation.
Squick/trigger warnings: Issues of consent and control relating to sex (not a torrid BDSM fic, but I

Comments

[fleckled]

Okay, it took me an extra day to get to this (:c) because my spring semester started up today so I was busy but I am so glad I decided to read this before bed! First off, wow. I am kind of dreading part two already because I started writing down my thoughts partway through this so I didn't forget things and it kind of spiralled into a mess. I'm sorry in advance. Moving right along...

I love how Kibum is the calm, rational voice of reason. I think that's a real side of him so many fics seem to overlook. His mildness is so captivating in this, especially in contrast to how all over the place and distraught Jinki is. And then, at the kitchen table, he goes from the voice of reason to sexy and dirty talking like it's no big deal. Awesome.

I also like how Jinki gets sick (which is a sentence I never thought I would say tbh). But really that would be such an incredibly awful feeling. Even though you didn't drag it out too long, you still let us know he was appropriately disgusted with himself.

I love all the little mentions Jinki makes of the things that Kibum does for him, and how they both show Kibum's affection and make Jinki tune in to having feelings for him, too. This little details are so present and real and human.

Okay so this
"And you … you’re flawless, and … enchanting, and -“
“I like this. ‘Enchanting,’ huh? Go on."

This Kibum is amazing, okay. That teasing edge while still laid-back aggh this is such a fine line with him for so many writers but it seems so effortless for you and I'm just gushing cause your Kibum is so precious.

“Maybe if we stood up…if you don’t mind,” Jinki suggested gently.

“I find that acceptable,” Kibum joked in snooty voice, gracefully rising to his feet and perching on the edge of the table. ...

...Jinki’s lips barely met Kibum’s as he slowly, so slowly, brushed his lips lightly back and forth across Kibum’s closed mouth, being as gentle and gradual as he could. He tenderly grazed the fingertips of one hand along Kibum’s sharp jaw line before sliding his fingers into the hair at his nape.

Okay, at this point I am freaking out a little. This is so good. Moments of intimacy get to me and you somehow gave burning sexual tension this soft, gentle edge that makes this moment feel so clear.
And then he -- "Please, let me in" -- this is so delicate but incredibly hot at the same time wow
And this role reversal between them is very nice. So natural, it just seemed to unfold all on its own. An easy progression. An easy, extremely hot progression.

To be honest I'm eager to get to part two so I think I kinda have to live with how spazzy this review is and hope you can make some sense of it. /o\

[jinkibumiminho]

[glomps onto you with kitten paws]

Thank you for such thoughtful comments. I'm so glad you like the characterization. This really plays like a movie on my head, and I felt like I was just channeling them when I wrote it out.

One of my favorite images of a first kiss is that barely there meeting of lips, enjoying the baby steps before everything gets deliciously sloppy. I'm glad that part worked for you, too!