Varied thinky sorts of things
Brian Cox has a blog and he had an interesting quote on it which led me to this wikipedia page about J B S Haldane who has loads of interesting quotes. (This is mostly for lewisian_gneiss as I know she's quite the Brian Cox fan, but others of you might find it interesting as well:)).
I'm being selfish today and staying home in my cave to work on fic and the ( Read more... )
I'm being selfish today and staying home in my cave to work on fic and the ( Read more... )
I have joined the ranks of the walking wounded, having just been diagnosed with "walking" pneumonia! It's a real misnomer, however, as even walking to the bathroom has me panting with fatigue. It should actually be called "crawling" pneumonia. I'm on several meds, so my various symptoms should be gone, soon, but the doc says that recovery for this is two weeks. I'm still working, against his advice, but as soon as I come home I sorta fold in on myself and just lie around. :/
All to say, I miss my life, and RL friends, and my Merliny friends, too. Waaa!
Anyway...I also want to say that I have finally read and sooooo enjoyed your Gwen/Lance fic. (Sorry it took so long!) It's so far from being "bad" jela! I really love the way you wrote the scene of their first meeting, letting us be privy to their inner thoughts. So well done! And this is the first time I've read your porn---and it's very goood! :) You writing is so confident and sure. I love the way you focus on, and draw the reader's attention to, small details. For me, that's what brings any fic alive, and yours feels very alive to me! :D
Since you asked for honesty, I will say something didn't quite work for me. (And please forgive my proceeding rambly, disorganized thoughts, because I'm on heavy medication, and also I've never been asked to comment on a fic before.) It has nothing to do with your actual writing, but with your plotting/pacing of the story. Basically, I think it needs to be longer--which also means I loved it and didn't want it to end so soon! It needs to be longer by your adding something(s) to the middle, between when they first meet, and when they make love. There needs to be a link or build up between these two scenes, I feel, because right now I'm finding the sex scene too sudden and abrupt. It just seems somehow out of character for Gwen (who I'm assuming is inexperienced, because how could she be otherwise?) to be having sex with Lancelot, and having that particular kind of sex with him, and so very soon after they've met. As hot as it is, part of me can't enjoy it because I don't quite believe it. Maybe they need to be thrown together several more times after that first meeting, maybe with shifts between their two narrative povs, and maybe there needs to be more angst and pining before they make love. (Maybe that's just me, because I love pining and angst!) I always saw Gwen as more suited to Lancelot than to Arthur, and maybe it's partly out of that that I just feel that their relationship deserves more of a build-up to the sex, and that the sex will be better (for them...and to read) as a result. Again---it all boils down to me wanting this to never really end! And I don't even ship Gwen and Lance! :D
Off I go to fetch my daughter from the school bus stop...and then come home and flop on the sofa again.
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Thanks so much for all the feedback. I'm glad that it mostly worked for you.
Hah, now I can tell you that I had struggled with this fic and it was one of my earlier attempts. I'm still definitely playing with things like pacing.
In my mind, this was not the first time they'd had sex. I should have made that more clear. In fact, it seems like it would be easy enough to fix with a well placed sentence or two.
I'm not sure I'm up to writing virgin!sex. *blush*
LOL at your love of pining and angst. It's kind of like salt; a little goes a long way for me:)
I think you are completely right about that. Maybe I'll go back and revisit it, if the plot bunnies ever leave me alone. I've currently got three fics cooking! Crazy.
So, I sold you Lancelot/Gwen? I ship them hard.:D
I hope you feel better soon. I think that feeling like a wet noodle with happy healthy kids around is the worst:(
Happy Valentines day. I hope you are feeling well loved!
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I have very little energy, but the various medications I'm taking now are definitely helping. At least I'm not coughing and feeling as achy, so I'm getting more rest and sleep than before, thank goodness.
Man, I'll have to read your fic again---I totally didn't pick up on the fact that this was not their first time together. Then again, I read the fic while feverish... ;)
Not big on pining and angst? Gods---I adore it, so long as there's a happy resolution.
Three fics! WOW! :D
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Yay, glad to hear there is improvement!
Oh, well, it was crappy writing, same as the Merlin writers do. I just sort of figured that people would assume it wasn't their first time, given the way they were having sex:).
It's hard to write pining and angst. I just want to get to the happy ending!
Yeah. 3. One is done and posted (Destiny and Doom), the second is drafted and nearing completion, the third is still stewing, let's say.
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