Redemption Chapter 16B
Jensen’s eyes snapped back into focus and he tore them away from where he’d been staring at the damning double doors at the opposite end of the waiting room. From the entrance came the twins, running around and between the hurt and ill patients still needing to be seen, their arms extended and faces glossy with flowing tears. He slipped from his
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*flails*
Goodness gracious, what a chapter!!!
My feelings are all over the place, what a ride! Jensen helpless, the boys' call, finding Jared, discovering his ordeal, revealing the pregnancy - and to top it all off you went and had your Tommy Lee Jones hunt Doctor bloody Kimble! *fistbumps* Jeez, woman...
Writing was impeccable, as I've come to love it, I liked the way you built up the chapter, starting out in the frustrating, enforced standstill at the sherrif's office (and damn, could I empathise with Jensen there! I was on the edge of my seat, anxious to solve the uncertainty you left us with at the last chapter), only to ramp up the action and drama with the call from the boys and then bring it to a satisfying resolution with everyone safe and together (well or "relatively safe", Jared only needs to wake up from his coma and overcome his trauma). This chapter more than delivered after that dramatic, heartbreaking, painful climax of the last chapter. Fantastically done!
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I'm really glad you liked the chapter I was concerned it was too over the top. Nice catch with The Fugitive allusion. I think you were the only one that caught it! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I love to hear how the chapters are received.
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