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downclouds June 6 2007, 23:09:58 UTC
wow. just wow. a little sad and a little hurtful and genderfucked and hopeful.

He buries his face in her damp, black hair. "You better be worth it," he whispers. He smells apples.

for some reason i really like that line. one of a lot of lines i like.

i wonder what happened to babystar though.

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diamond_dazzler June 7 2007, 01:54:00 UTC
Oh, thanks! I'm really glad you like it. This is like.... the first original story I've ever finished on my own (without co-writer or extra help and stuff), so I was really nervous about it. :)

As for babystar-- yeah, I wonder as well. I'm tempted to either do a sequel or find some way to expand on this world somewhat.

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downclouds June 7 2007, 01:56:37 UTC
lol well i'd be super psyched if you did!

and i've never actually finished an original story either. so i'm envious ;]

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lacewood June 7 2007, 08:58:50 UTC
Supposed editorial neutrality aside, I thought your story was awesome. XD (Francesca Lia Block references! Meet cyberpunk! Meet genderfuck!)

I'd love to see a sequel. XD

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wordsofastory July 31 2007, 20:32:16 UTC
Oh, wow. This is an awesome, awesome story. I adore the writing style, and the worldbuilding which you drop in through allusions. Also? Agent is insanely hot, in a strange, genderfucked way. I really like the ending, though I also would love to see what happened to Babystar. This is an amazing story, and I love the vivid little details of it. Great job!

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diamond_dazzler August 31 2007, 19:57:43 UTC
Oh man, super late reply. Sorry! It didn't occur to me to check back and see if anyone posted a reply. *feels bad*

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the story-- like I said in a previous reply, it's my first longish-finished-and-actually-submitted story, so I'm just ecstatic that people seem to like it. Yes, I agree that Agent is dead hawt. Heheh. And not just because I wrote her! Oh, if I could write some sort of Further Adventures with her, and Babystar, and Face, I totally would! Ideas are already half percolating!

re Allusions: Oh god. This is where I really wish I had learned me my English from teachers that actually taught the technical stuff, rather than the experimental/conceptual creativity types so that I don't get so confused when confronted with a technical term I'm pretty certain I know. I think I vaguely know what you mean, and...uh, thanks. I worked hard! *two thumbs up*

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hakuen December 9 2007, 00:40:08 UTC
This is brilliant and I hope you have a zillion more comments somewhere else on it. Or something. I've read it half a dozen times and just now realized I'd never commented. It kind of blows away everything else going on in my head, including intentions of commenting... terrible excuse, but yeah. And I don't really have anything else to say; I can only repeat, "Wow. ...wow. Yeah. Wow."

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woodburner July 12 2008, 23:53:34 UTC
Holy fucknozzle. This was flippin' amazing.

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