ah! i'm intrigued! i really like it so far! and the descriptions were amazing. as cliched as it sounds, i really felt like i was there. especially in the back alley part. i think i must have missed this on my f-list b/c i'm not used to taking note of your new journal name, but i will be more observant next time! lol. thank you for the spot! i can't wait to read more!
OH MY GOSH....TT____TT I'm crying rn....do you see those tears? They're of happiness! You...you gave me a spooooooooooooooot oh my god unni!!!! I love you <3
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This is really interesting...you're really good at describing situations. It's all so real, and the writing flows well. The story itself, well I'm looking forward to it to say the least!
Gahh you don't know how happy this spot made me...(maybealittletoohappy) XD
I'm one paragraph in and I already want to quote the entire thing back to you (don't worry I won't)
the driver was operating on strict instructions. Taemin didn't have to know anything or utter a single word oh? why do I suddenly feel like this is going to be a naughty fic
hateful flash-bulbs I love when something inanimate gets an emotional descriptive, making any sense?
as he disembarked and picked his way to the rear of the cab I really like your choice of words. I'd probably would've written something like 'he got out and walked to the back of the cab'
his glove was sopping. He mused on the dry streak he must have left on the cab's trunkOkay so I'm quoting everything, whatever. The fact that he's wearing gloves like a fabulous Hollywood starlette from the 50's. The mention of something so small as a wiped spot on a car which nobody will ever notice or care about and has already become wet again. Poetry ;_
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OMFG THIS COMMENT! God you picked up on EVERYTHING!
Just the fact that you mentioned the part with the glove and the trunk I just >.< idek! *flails at you*
Thanks for the advice hun honestly it helps. I think that's already happened with my first 2min ;~; I think I'm just going to have to ruin the story for somebody I know and tell them what I have planned so I can get some feed back about pov's and such...I hate doing that though XD
Thanks so much for reading and commenting hun. You're awesome!
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I loved this
intrigued~
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i really like it so far!
and the descriptions were amazing. as cliched as it sounds, i really felt like i was there. especially in the back alley part.
i think i must have missed this on my f-list b/c i'm not used to taking note of your new journal name, but i will be more observant next time! lol.
thank you for the spot!
i can't wait to read more!
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
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(Overdramatic reaction aside)
This is really interesting...you're really good at describing situations. It's all so real, and the writing flows well. The story itself, well I'm looking forward to it to say the least!
Gahh you don't know how happy this spot made me...(maybealittletoohappy) XD
Fantastic job!!! <3<3<3
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
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the driver was operating on strict instructions. Taemin didn't have to know anything or utter a single word
oh?
why do I suddenly feel like this is going to be a naughty fic
hateful flash-bulbs
I love when something inanimate gets an emotional descriptive, making any sense?
as he disembarked and picked his way to the rear of the cab
I really like your choice of words. I'd probably would've written something like 'he got out and walked to the back of the cab'
his glove was sopping. He mused on the dry streak he must have left on the cab's trunkOkay so I'm quoting everything, whatever. The fact that he's wearing gloves like a fabulous Hollywood starlette from the 50's. The mention of something so small as a wiped spot on a car which nobody will ever notice or care about and has already become wet again. Poetry ;_ ( ... )
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God you picked up on EVERYTHING!
Just the fact that you mentioned the part with the glove and the trunk I just >.< idek! *flails at you*
Thanks for the advice hun honestly it helps. I think that's already happened with my first 2min ;~;
I think I'm just going to have to ruin the story for somebody I know and tell them what I have planned so I can get some feed back about pov's and such...I hate doing that though XD
Thanks so much for reading and commenting hun. You're awesome!
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