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Hello, I just joined this community and I have an itch to write this Wilson centric character study. I'm just starting it, but I'm writing it in second person because I haven't tried that out and I want to take some more risks with my writing. I'm just looking for concrit right now, even though I could use a beta..... :)
Takes place sometime after third season ends.
Here's a sample..
Hidden behind the a pile of gym shorts and socks in your top dresser drawer were all three of your wedding rings. Lined up in order, first marriage to last; little black box reminders of what you couldn’t keep together. You select one at random, plucking the smooth golden ring out of it’s home. Spin it absentmindedly, memories whirring from wherever they were hidden. This one was your second; Julie’s, you knows that like you knows your name is James. It was strange, but this ring, this band that once symbolized so much to you, honor, love, commitment, now means nothing. Just another empty promise, like the one before it, and the one after.
The phone rings, jarring you out of whatever trip down memory lane you decided to go on. You cough once, and pick up.
“James Wilson.”
“Are you crying?” It’s House. You snort, and sit on the bed, loosening your tie with your free hand.
“No.”
“You really should. Let it all out. It helps.”
“Like you would know anything about that.”
“Not fair! I have feelings. “
“Throwing a hissy fit because The L-Word is cancelled is not technically the same as ‘Letting it all out.’”
“It’s not why you do it, Jimmy. It’s how it makes you feel.”
“What do you want?” You sigh, kicking off your shoes and sinking deep into your mattress.
“New duckling applications. I need a second opinion.”
“I tried to help you when you decided to fire Cameron. I wasn’t aware I was so helpful.”
“You weren’t. Your puppy dog eyes and polite, albeit boring manners distract them so I can pass judgement and decide what I think.”
“Since when do you need a deflective shield to pass judgement on others?”
“I don’t. I learned some new sparring skills the last time Cuddy and I...”
“Okay, enough.”
Please, comment on anything, the characterizations, the banter especially. I want to delve into Wilson's numerous marriages, contrasting on how they are really just temporary relationships while his realationship with House is such a constant.
If anyone is willing to beta, that would be great too. I tend to make things overly wordy, something I want to avoid. I also get a little "Comma crazy" and grammer sometimes is a little weird. (Not 100% sure about my semi-colon useage)
All comments and thoughts are much appreciated.
Takes place sometime after third season ends.
Here's a sample..
Hidden behind the a pile of gym shorts and socks in your top dresser drawer were all three of your wedding rings. Lined up in order, first marriage to last; little black box reminders of what you couldn’t keep together. You select one at random, plucking the smooth golden ring out of it’s home. Spin it absentmindedly, memories whirring from wherever they were hidden. This one was your second; Julie’s, you knows that like you knows your name is James. It was strange, but this ring, this band that once symbolized so much to you, honor, love, commitment, now means nothing. Just another empty promise, like the one before it, and the one after.
The phone rings, jarring you out of whatever trip down memory lane you decided to go on. You cough once, and pick up.
“James Wilson.”
“Are you crying?” It’s House. You snort, and sit on the bed, loosening your tie with your free hand.
“No.”
“You really should. Let it all out. It helps.”
“Like you would know anything about that.”
“Not fair! I have feelings. “
“Throwing a hissy fit because The L-Word is cancelled is not technically the same as ‘Letting it all out.’”
“It’s not why you do it, Jimmy. It’s how it makes you feel.”
“What do you want?” You sigh, kicking off your shoes and sinking deep into your mattress.
“New duckling applications. I need a second opinion.”
“I tried to help you when you decided to fire Cameron. I wasn’t aware I was so helpful.”
“You weren’t. Your puppy dog eyes and polite, albeit boring manners distract them so I can pass judgement and decide what I think.”
“Since when do you need a deflective shield to pass judgement on others?”
“I don’t. I learned some new sparring skills the last time Cuddy and I...”
“Okay, enough.”
Please, comment on anything, the characterizations, the banter especially. I want to delve into Wilson's numerous marriages, contrasting on how they are really just temporary relationships while his realationship with House is such a constant.
If anyone is willing to beta, that would be great too. I tend to make things overly wordy, something I want to avoid. I also get a little "Comma crazy" and grammer sometimes is a little weird. (Not 100% sure about my semi-colon useage)
All comments and thoughts are much appreciated.