de-aged Sulu fic

[hollycomb]

Someone wanted Kirk/Sulu with de-aged Sulu this weekend and a couple of people filled it before I finished mine, so I threw in some Chekov for good measure.

Title: Code 78
Fandom: Star Trek
Pairing: Kirk/Sulu, Sulu/Chekov (to a lesser degree)
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~5,000
Summary: Sulu gets de-aged and Kirk and Chekov volunteer to take care of

Comments

[kawasakininja]

I really like de-aged fics, well, for the reasons everybody who likes them likes them probably. Kids are cute and there is like an instant recipe for sweetness. That said, this story was like that, but at the same time it was more. I liked the way you approached it, with seriousness, mentioning a specific code and Hikaru's initial reaction, his thoughts and emotions making the whole process of age regression very realistic. Also despite the cuteness of a six year old Hikaru and Kirk and Chekov bantering over him in a way that at times made them all look like the Three Stooges (never watched it, so forgive me if I am way off) the overall feeling of the story was very bittersweet. All three of them tangled up like that, hurting and getting hurt in the process. It was very touching and I don't know I'm not sure I needed the actual closure and tying up the lose ends in the last sentence, it maybe felt little bit rushed? But I don't mean to offend you in any way, because I loved the story for its depth and flawed characters. (I'm looking at you, Kirk :D) It was like a storm in a teacup? Concentrated in regards to place and time setting but overflowing with emotions.

[hollycomb]

Thank you for reading and for the feedback! I love de-aged fics, but yeah, I prefer for them to deal with some issues/reveal things about the adult's personality that he/she was trying to hide, and is still trying to hide, I guess, doing so less successfully as a child.

I'm glad this has a Three Stooges-esque feeling, lol (I've never seen it, either, but I know what you mean!), I guess the original idea was that it would be funny to see Kirk and Chekov scrambling for Hikaru's attention with their two different ~parenting styles~

Yeah, I figured the ending might feel a bit rushed -- this is kind of like a chunk of emotion wrapped up in a much longer fic I'm writing about the three of them, so I didn't really flesh out the romance, and I wasn't planning on ending with a ~kiss~, but then I really liked the idea that Kirk would save the picture, Sulu would see it, Kirk would know he saw it -- and then it was too sad to think of Kirk being left to feel awkward/embarrassed without Sulu making some kind of sweeping gesture. ;__;

It was like a storm in a teacup?

Awesome -- that is basically what I intended!! :D Thanks again.