It's a CYOA! Kill it!
Poor Hiei, the abused soul. I found myself a Hiei clone! It's awful...
Title: falling for hiei
Culprit Author's Name: hiei inuyasha lover13
Rating:
Full Name: Sakura Honda ...no, just no
Species: Fire demon I wonder where this is going? *palmface*
Hair Color: "black hair with white tips"
Eye Color: "crimson eyes"
Markings: The word 'Hiei clone' stamped on her forehead
Possessions: The Jagan Eye which is hidden underneath a bandanna as well, a little sister, and an RV to house all her angst.
Origin: The womb of a demented, unimaginative creator
Connections to Canon: Looks EXACTLY like Hiei and falls in love with him. To be honest, I wouldn't fall in love with some one who looks exactly like myself.
Special Abilities: Fire demon, Jagan eye, the works.
Pros: I really didn't want to read it to find out.
Cons: It's in the Choose Your Own Adventure format. I hate those. Sue Logic abounds as the girl's a fire demon but she doesn't live in the Makai. No, she lives in Ningenkai where she can't be killed by a demon. The divorce case with her parents is weird and the stupidness abounds and enslaves all logic and interest. Capitalization problems, spelling errors, and crap lives here and spawns. Oh, Sakura is never capitalized. I don't know why either. It's awful, I might just report it for being a CYOA.
Sample:
Alright your name is sakura Honda This already has lost its potential and you’re a 17 year old girl. Wow. (Your name is that because I like the name sakura) Author's note must die You have black hair with white tips and crimson eyes. Hm, I wonder who that looks like now? Your hair goes to your mid back but it’s usually in a pony tail and your bangs cover most of your eyes to hide the bandana. You are a fire apparition Of course I am. and have a jagan eye *blinks* Okay... just like hiei but you hide it under a bandana. Hiei's is considered a bandanna as well, maybe a ward You are about the height of hiei. Yeah, I gathered that One of your eyes is not yours since of an accident when you were young. FTW? You had someone else’s eyes in you. *blinks* Do I want to know? You are a junior in high school but you usually never go to class since you’re always in trouble. Yeah, I bet You have a younger sister but she lives with your mother. You live with your father and are now going to a new school since the old one kicked you out. Plot device of the suethors Your parents are divorce and since then you were a bad ass. I bet I was Also you have some sort of weapon with you all at times. Wow, no description here whatsoever Your also and artist
----Flashback---- Yay! Too bad we haven't even done anything to start one
You were 6 years old and running around with your 3 years old sister Kara. Oh yeah, that's a completely acceptable Japanese name You were sent out of the house since your parents were fighting.
“It’s your fault for our child!” Your mother yelled while you and Kara peek around the corner.
“Well im sorry that our children are demons ...Okay and not humans. Boo hoo on what your parents think of your children. Well yeah, they're actually considered HALF-DEMONS I mean they did bore a demon child which is you!” Your father growled while getting angry.
“Why do you always bring up my parents when we’re fighting you know how bout this I want a DIVORCE!” That's not much of a reason to get a divorce She screamed while throwing a vase toward your direction and the pieces shatter and one right into your eyes. One? Just one? You screamed in pain as your parents ran over and drove you to the hospital. They removed your eyes ...The surgery logic astounds me. and replaced it with someone else’s Great. Who the hell has red eyes though? and while they did that your parents were signing papers for their divorce. *blinks* If I was injured, I doubt my parents would be signing divorce papers, considering they now have to pay a ridiculous hospital bill.
In court
“Fine the father gets sakura Why is her name never capitalized? while you get Kara. Case dismissed” The judged yelled while you looked through one eyes ...nevermind since one was still in bandages.
“Daddy where is Kara and mommy going?” You asked while your father hugged you.
“They’re leaving to live without us sakura im sorry that this has to happen.”
-----End flashback------
You were holding onto your eye as your father was driving you to your school.
“Sakura are you alright? I see your touching that eye you really need to know that the divorce was for the best.” I doubt many people's dads speak like that Your father said while you grunted. You arrived at your new school wearing all black Wannabe goth, oh wait, we're copying Hiei so we have to wear black and you walked out of the car walking away. The hell was that? Your father drove away as you walked to your first class keeping your head down.
/remember sakura no fighting/ your father telepathed while you nodded and walked in to the teacher grabbing your arm. How the hell did she know where to go?
“Hello you must be sakura WTF? I would like you to stay in the front of the class to say a few words about yourself” Your teacher, Ms. Amaya said while the bell rang. “Good morning class we have a new student here and her name is sakura Honda. Please tell us a little about yourself.”
“HN just leave me alone and I shall with you.” I smite you now, Sue! you said while walking to your seat and sitting down next to the window. A boy with red hair walked into the classroom and apologized to the teacher and 3 other boys walked into the room. One had minty black hair Minty? that had too much hair gel and was wearing a green jumpsuit. Another came in he had orange hair and looked pretty muscular but had a stupid looking face and he was wearing an orange jumpsuit. One more came in he had black gravity defying hair and a bandana wrapped around his head like you and he was wearing black clothing and a katana ...Why is Hiei bringing a weapon to school? Why is Hiei even AT school? on his side. They sat around you and the boy with orange hair was staring at you the whole time.
Title: falling for hiei
Culprit Author's Name: hiei inuyasha lover13
Rating:
Full Name: Sakura Honda ...no, just no
Species: Fire demon I wonder where this is going? *palmface*
Hair Color: "black hair with white tips"
Eye Color: "crimson eyes"
Markings: The word 'Hiei clone' stamped on her forehead
Possessions: The Jagan Eye which is hidden underneath a bandanna as well, a little sister, and an RV to house all her angst.
Origin: The womb of a demented, unimaginative creator
Connections to Canon: Looks EXACTLY like Hiei and falls in love with him. To be honest, I wouldn't fall in love with some one who looks exactly like myself.
Special Abilities: Fire demon, Jagan eye, the works.
Pros: I really didn't want to read it to find out.
Cons: It's in the Choose Your Own Adventure format. I hate those. Sue Logic abounds as the girl's a fire demon but she doesn't live in the Makai. No, she lives in Ningenkai where she can't be killed by a demon. The divorce case with her parents is weird and the stupidness abounds and enslaves all logic and interest. Capitalization problems, spelling errors, and crap lives here and spawns. Oh, Sakura is never capitalized. I don't know why either. It's awful, I might just report it for being a CYOA.
Sample:
Alright your name is sakura Honda This already has lost its potential and you’re a 17 year old girl. Wow. (Your name is that because I like the name sakura) Author's note must die You have black hair with white tips and crimson eyes. Hm, I wonder who that looks like now? Your hair goes to your mid back but it’s usually in a pony tail and your bangs cover most of your eyes to hide the bandana. You are a fire apparition Of course I am. and have a jagan eye *blinks* Okay... just like hiei but you hide it under a bandana. Hiei's is considered a bandanna as well, maybe a ward You are about the height of hiei. Yeah, I gathered that One of your eyes is not yours since of an accident when you were young. FTW? You had someone else’s eyes in you. *blinks* Do I want to know? You are a junior in high school but you usually never go to class since you’re always in trouble. Yeah, I bet You have a younger sister but she lives with your mother. You live with your father and are now going to a new school since the old one kicked you out. Plot device of the suethors Your parents are divorce and since then you were a bad ass. I bet I was Also you have some sort of weapon with you all at times. Wow, no description here whatsoever Your also and artist
----Flashback---- Yay! Too bad we haven't even done anything to start one
You were 6 years old and running around with your 3 years old sister Kara. Oh yeah, that's a completely acceptable Japanese name You were sent out of the house since your parents were fighting.
“It’s your fault for our child!” Your mother yelled while you and Kara peek around the corner.
“Well im sorry that our children are demons ...Okay and not humans. Boo hoo on what your parents think of your children. Well yeah, they're actually considered HALF-DEMONS I mean they did bore a demon child which is you!” Your father growled while getting angry.
“Why do you always bring up my parents when we’re fighting you know how bout this I want a DIVORCE!” That's not much of a reason to get a divorce She screamed while throwing a vase toward your direction and the pieces shatter and one right into your eyes. One? Just one? You screamed in pain as your parents ran over and drove you to the hospital. They removed your eyes ...The surgery logic astounds me. and replaced it with someone else’s Great. Who the hell has red eyes though? and while they did that your parents were signing papers for their divorce. *blinks* If I was injured, I doubt my parents would be signing divorce papers, considering they now have to pay a ridiculous hospital bill.
In court
“Fine the father gets sakura Why is her name never capitalized? while you get Kara. Case dismissed” The judged yelled while you looked through one eyes ...nevermind since one was still in bandages.
“Daddy where is Kara and mommy going?” You asked while your father hugged you.
“They’re leaving to live without us sakura im sorry that this has to happen.”
-----End flashback------
You were holding onto your eye as your father was driving you to your school.
“Sakura are you alright? I see your touching that eye you really need to know that the divorce was for the best.” I doubt many people's dads speak like that Your father said while you grunted. You arrived at your new school wearing all black Wannabe goth, oh wait, we're copying Hiei so we have to wear black and you walked out of the car walking away. The hell was that? Your father drove away as you walked to your first class keeping your head down.
/remember sakura no fighting/ your father telepathed while you nodded and walked in to the teacher grabbing your arm. How the hell did she know where to go?
“Hello you must be sakura WTF? I would like you to stay in the front of the class to say a few words about yourself” Your teacher, Ms. Amaya said while the bell rang. “Good morning class we have a new student here and her name is sakura Honda. Please tell us a little about yourself.”
“HN just leave me alone and I shall with you.” I smite you now, Sue! you said while walking to your seat and sitting down next to the window. A boy with red hair walked into the classroom and apologized to the teacher and 3 other boys walked into the room. One had minty black hair Minty? that had too much hair gel and was wearing a green jumpsuit. Another came in he had orange hair and looked pretty muscular but had a stupid looking face and he was wearing an orange jumpsuit. One more came in he had black gravity defying hair and a bandana wrapped around his head like you and he was wearing black clothing and a katana ...Why is Hiei bringing a weapon to school? Why is Hiei even AT school? on his side. They sat around you and the boy with orange hair was staring at you the whole time.