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Title: secret love
Culprit Author's Name: prinadey shy suki
Rating:
Full Name: shy This person does not use Mr. Caps Locks nor Mr. Shift Key
Species: demon, witch, princess How can one be of a 'princess' race?
Hair Color: "long blonde hair to her lower back"
Eye Color: "blueish greenish"
Markings: I cannot figure out if she has any
Possessions: No grammar book of any kind, I can tell you that much
Origin: A girl with the writing of a six year-old
Connections to Canon: Meets our four boys and I think falls in love with one of them. I cannot for the life of me figure out which one though
Special Abilities: I really cannot read this to find out
Pros: Nothing.
Cons: This is like the first 'Killed Hiei' rating. It's a piece of crap. There's no sense of spelling, capitalization, grammar, plot, or anything. Several people have already told her it's a Sue but she doesn't seem to listen. Sometimes it's in script format and sometimes it's not. I cannot stand to even look at it for a short period of time, nonetheless read it. It should just burn in the lowest layer of hell and never creep back out. EVER.
Sample:
i wake up in a cold pitch black room on the floor I damn well hope you're on the floor.my head hurt's (try's to get up) OWWWW my back! No capitalization and it's now an RPG thing.
(turn's on the light) (someone open's the door) glad to see your awake said a tall boy with long red hair with emerald green What the hell? What is this?
eye's.uhhhh who are you? wait where the heck am i, well im kurama and me and my friend's found you laying on the ground Yeah...who the hell's talking?
in demon world so we took you here..uh huh said the girl.. so what's your name? said kurama. It's shy, nice to meet you shy said
the boy.Well let's head down stair's so we can introduce you to the other's, okay said shy.
It's a giant load of crap...and more.
(down stair's)
hmmm so your awake you been asleep for 10 hour's.. said a old lady. there was a black spikey hair dude on the window cill. For a moment, I thought that said "chill."
and two boy's agrueing over a sandwich one with black hair gelled back and the other guy with orange hair.
shy this is hiei said kurama pointing to the guy on the window cill.hiei just stare's and those two over there are.
yusuke and kuwabara and this is old lady is genkai. Kurama would NEVER call Genkai an old lady and live. hi said shy in a nervous voice.so how come a beatiful girl
like you is in demon world knocked out? (punches him) dont touch me kuwabara (the orange head fell back while
yusuke is laughing) hn. said hiei looking out the window. HEY! YOU OVER THERE THE ONE IN THE DRESS!
WHAT'S YOUR PROUBLEM NEVER SEEN A GIRL PUCH A GUY BEFORE! WTF just happened?
(hiei give's her a death glare) it's a cape you patheic fool!. yea yea shorty.
It gets worse, trust me.
Title: secret love
Culprit Author's Name: prinadey shy suki
Rating:
Full Name: shy This person does not use Mr. Caps Locks nor Mr. Shift Key
Species: demon, witch, princess How can one be of a 'princess' race?
Hair Color: "long blonde hair to her lower back"
Eye Color: "blueish greenish"
Markings: I cannot figure out if she has any
Possessions: No grammar book of any kind, I can tell you that much
Origin: A girl with the writing of a six year-old
Connections to Canon: Meets our four boys and I think falls in love with one of them. I cannot for the life of me figure out which one though
Special Abilities: I really cannot read this to find out
Pros: Nothing.
Cons: This is like the first 'Killed Hiei' rating. It's a piece of crap. There's no sense of spelling, capitalization, grammar, plot, or anything. Several people have already told her it's a Sue but she doesn't seem to listen. Sometimes it's in script format and sometimes it's not. I cannot stand to even look at it for a short period of time, nonetheless read it. It should just burn in the lowest layer of hell and never creep back out. EVER.
Sample:
i wake up in a cold pitch black room on the floor I damn well hope you're on the floor.my head hurt's (try's to get up) OWWWW my back! No capitalization and it's now an RPG thing.
(turn's on the light) (someone open's the door) glad to see your awake said a tall boy with long red hair with emerald green What the hell? What is this?
eye's.uhhhh who are you? wait where the heck am i, well im kurama and me and my friend's found you laying on the ground Yeah...who the hell's talking?
in demon world so we took you here..uh huh said the girl.. so what's your name? said kurama. It's shy, nice to meet you shy said
the boy.Well let's head down stair's so we can introduce you to the other's, okay said shy.
It's a giant load of crap...and more.
(down stair's)
hmmm so your awake you been asleep for 10 hour's.. said a old lady. there was a black spikey hair dude on the window cill. For a moment, I thought that said "chill."
and two boy's agrueing over a sandwich one with black hair gelled back and the other guy with orange hair.
shy this is hiei said kurama pointing to the guy on the window cill.hiei just stare's and those two over there are.
yusuke and kuwabara and this is old lady is genkai. Kurama would NEVER call Genkai an old lady and live. hi said shy in a nervous voice.so how come a beatiful girl
like you is in demon world knocked out? (punches him) dont touch me kuwabara (the orange head fell back while
yusuke is laughing) hn. said hiei looking out the window. HEY! YOU OVER THERE THE ONE IN THE DRESS!
WHAT'S YOUR PROUBLEM NEVER SEEN A GIRL PUCH A GUY BEFORE! WTF just happened?
(hiei give's her a death glare) it's a cape you patheic fool!. yea yea shorty.
It gets worse, trust me.