They Met and Parted (part 2)

Jun 25, 2008 15:43

Title: They Met and Parted
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hanasim June 26 2008, 03:55:19 UTC
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OMG THIS IS REALLY REALLY GOOD. I love it so much I shall now um spam you with the parts I liked lol XDDD

Tegoshi Yuya… Masuda thought and then the softest gust of wind blew Tegoshi’s hair away from his pretty face and Masuda knew he was in love.

omg I like this like line, the scene feels so ethereal and I just love the simplicity of it. No need for endless conversations or internal debating, just suddenly realizing and admitting to it =D

...and shouting in pain as he almost dislocated his head from his neck. “Tegoshi!!! That’s more than just a one word sentence!!!” Masuda exclaimed...

LOL so Tegoshi is practically mute half the time lol and Massu is just bubbling with cuteness here as him fumbles he way through an actual conversation with Tegoshi =P

Tegoshi just nodded because their P.E. teacher spotted them talking and told them to do 30 push-ups

rofl that was random. reminds me of my younger days XD

It was just Massu who persuaded him to go using his irresistible puppy eyes complete with a cute pout and a quiver on his lower lip every now and then

Normally this would be Tegoshi instead but somehow the Massu in your story is able to pull it off too hehe. I don't think I can resist Massu's puppy eyes if I were to see it lol.

And the confession part is just bittersweet. I felt sad when they discover they had to part right after they just confessed to each other =(

Tegoshi smiled and curled his delicate hands around Massu’s, it was still warm like he remembered. It was so long ago, but somehow it still feels right, like his hands belonged there, like it was made to fit perfectly inside Massu’s hands.

AWWWWWW!!!! This made me smile =) Yes, yes tegomass forever XD

The smut was nicely written you can feel the tension lol and it doesn't comes off as trashy unlike some but then after that omg the story takes such a sad turn aldkasdja I am still feeling melancholy now =(

Tegoshi then hugs him from behind. It’s been so long since he did this and the scent of Masuda fills his nose. He wanted so much to cry at the moment of peace he felt when he hugged him. He wished things could be like this forever. “I love you Massu…” he whispers softly, gently, as if afraid that his voice might break the peace he felt. And Masuda breaks his heart that morning when he didn’t say anything and stands up to leave.

No Massu why? why? why? Why you go and break Tegoshi's heart waaaa~ T_____________T

A tear drops on Massu’s happy face and Tegoshi wipes it off with his thumb but another tear falls and wets the glass

Am reduced to a mass of sobbing mess by this point. You are good at putting the atmosphere of the situation so clearly into words.

........Tegoshi killed himself......*shocked stupor* I didn't expect that. Was thinking more along the lines of an accident or something to that effect. The whole scene reminds me of the final scene in Last Friends 11 which was so utterly sad too ='( And the ending is so sweet yet tragic. The note was sweet but it's too late and Tego's gone already T_____________T

This is completely different from your normal fluffy Tegomass fics (which I love) but it is still as awesome in its own right. The amount of melodramatic flair is just right and oh I don't know I just love this fic so much even if it made me sad and you should so write long dramatic tegomass fics like this every now and then cause I really enjoyed reading it ^^

PS. hahaha so the girl was you lol you caused Tegoshi's death ahahaha well, indirectly maybe but still!!! XD Well, now that he's *ahem* gone, you can continue spending many more nights with Massu now XP

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heiryzmylisza June 26 2008, 05:37:45 UTC
OMG!!! i woke up to find this and i truly love you for giving me this!!!

ILU for spamming my page like this... chuuu~!!! ^o^

i like the soft wind part too!!!
i mean, for me, i think it just seems so natural for massu to realize he's in love with tesshi just like that ne?

and massu pouting!!! i can't believe people don't realize how cute massu would look like if he's pouting too!!! come on!!! with that kissable lips? maybe he's even better than tegoshi!!! *gets shot*

i'm really really glad you like this ne?

lol... i promise to write you one emo fic okay?
there are plot bunnies on my mind at work already!!! ^_______^

ahaha... well, good news for me!!! lmao. XD

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hanasim June 26 2008, 09:57:35 UTC
Falling in love so naturally is most definitely the sweetest^^

And Massu would be super adorable if he pouts I agree omg his cheeks are so pinch-able XD and his lips is the 2nd nicest in NEWS after Pi lol. Ahhh, even better than Tegoshi?! Probably lol in different ways maybe. Tego's pout kinda makes you go all ~kawaii~ and gives in to whatever he wants whereas if MASSU were to pout I would probably go KYA!!! and glomp him in a second and never let go leaving him no opportunity to state his wishes whatsoever ahahaha XD

And yay for more fics!!! *happy*

Then I should so comment on your fics more so you'll have more inspiration and motivation to write XD

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heiryzmylisza June 26 2008, 11:14:30 UTC
i totally agree with you!!! ^______^

ahaha... i also had the same thoughts about massu!!! i said if i ever meet him in person, i'd probably pinch his cheeks first!!! lol. fangirl attack!!! XD. anyway, yeah, tegoshi's uber adorable and massu... is... erm...*at a loss for words*... just cute and everything in synonym with that word!!! ahaha...

yeah, you should probably do that ne?

aaacckkk... massu's bday is near!!! gotta work on my fic again!!!

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