Feb 17, 2011 15:21
The reason I haven't posted the last few chapters of Love In The Fast Lanes, is that, apparantly, when I put them on my USB... I didn't just put COPIES, I put THEM... and I lost my USB!
HOWEVER I have found it, it is at home, so they will be up soon.
ALSO! My lovely beta/concrit giver has reviewd my BBB and proclaims it actually DOESN'T suck, but is actually quite good... go figure, huh?
However, I'd really like a few second opinions (...that's not right, is it?) and I'd really like for some other people to give me concrit as well. Just to be sure. SO if you're willing to read over my BBB and MAINLY focus on picking apart the story and stuff you like and dislike, I'd really enjoy it. I don't mind grammar/spelling only betas, but I need someone who can really give it a go and try and help me out. She claims it's pretty good, but I still really don't like the way it flows. It feels like it isn't smooth and continuous... more like reading on rapids or something.
The tentative summary would be something like this, if you want to take a look:
When Patrick Stump met Pete Wentz, he would have never imagined that just over two years later he would be the owner of Sugar & Spice, his very own, brand new, bakery. The new husband of an eccentric millionaire, Patrick's first few months owning a bakery are definately not what he expected. Amid being the latest local scandal and dealing with a neurotic husband, Patrick is faced with the struggles of running a work environment full of the craziest employees he had ever met, as well as planning for two major events for the shop to deal with. With mounting pressure at the bakery, will Patrick overlook the slow unraveling of his husband's faith in their relationship, or will he be able to save their marriage before it's too late?
... Yes, that is the worst summary ever... or maybe just a bad one for this story... but it's the best I could come up with off the top of my head!
... So yeah, help with a summary wouldn't hurt either, you know *winkwinknudgenudge*
Anyways, that's basically all I'm looking for now... someone to give a second opinion.
ALSO, I just started another fic last night (I don't really feel like writing a chaptered fic again, so I've got like... 5 long-oneshot WIPs, lol) that I think you guys will like the concept of! It's a Spencer/Brendon fic that like... it's almost got a frame story, sorta? Idk how to explain it, but like... it goes between Spencer and Brendon at 'present' together and in a relationship and shit, and it starts with Spencer waking up and watching Brendon sleep and then thinking back on events in the past. The first is when he met Brendon, and then it stays in 2005 for a little while in getting to know him, then like... it goes back to present for a bit and has them going back to ANOTHER event... and basically it's going to go on like that. Going from present to flashbacks (only not really written as much like flashbacks... though they are)... idk, I think it'll be pretty interesting.
What you guys think?
update,
bbb,
beta,
help