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Sight the King - chapter 18.B
Summary: After Yuugi wakes up at the scene of a crime with blood on his hands and a voice in his head, there's only one thing he can do: Run.
( in which - well. You know. )
Summary: After Yuugi wakes up at the scene of a crime with blood on his hands and a voice in his head, there's only one thing he can do: Run.
( in which - well. You know. )
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The concept of translucent!Yami no Yuugi and Yuugi having sex is simply mind-boggling but so delightful to, well, read. But the soul room - the solid part - is also so... argh! My words just died.
*groans* Another kidnapping? Just when it's cuddly moment of aftersex? Well, damn. XD
Multiple hearts for this chapter. ♥ I'll probably offer a more...detailed/coherent review when I've calmed down. Or something. *prances away*
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!! I love the thought of them trying to be sexy when dark Yuugi has to worry about getting pushed through walls or beds and such.
Should I take 'argh!' as a compliment, then?
Erm, hahahaha, well. It's really the first real kidnapping [there's been the shanghai escort bicycle service, and the voluntary 'put me on a train'], but, erm, yes. Because with the dark Yuugi around, there's no other situation where he'd be distracted enough to not notice they're being kidnapped.
Yaaay. I look forward to possible coherency, then.
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Yes, you should take 'argh!' as a compliment. :3
Okay, on to more coherent things:
A - bedroom things! Yes, yes. Yuugi's personality in the first part was so uncanonlike, it's lovely. *w* I mean, there aren't a lot of fics out there who write Yuugi like that, especially the last bit of the first part: “I want to fuck you, other me.”?! That was another spaz-moment for me, because, goodness, you have no idea how much I like reading dominant!Yuugi. And, erm, yes, rambling now.B - also on the end of the first part: AHA! I knew that you'd manage to sneak in clues of things-to-come inbetween the very intimate and heated moments. But you didn't spoil the mood at all. Score ( ... )
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B: What made me slightly sad was that the "end of the first part", as you say, was actually supposed to be in the middle of this GIANT BLOCK OF TEXT, so it wouldn't have stood out nearly as much. Oh well. Foreshadowing! Dun dun dun...
C: ^_^ Confession time: the 'condom moment' was, actually, the first scene of this entire story that I thought of. That one scene was the thing I was writing for. I spent five months and 100,000 wprds trying to get to that ONE scene! Erm. I'm glad it played well. And no - even though they're "solid" in the heart's room, they're essentially just inside Yuugi' ( ... )
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This chapter was both good and evil at the same time. It was good because, YAY~ you can now successfully say that yes, your two little baby muses are all grown up. At the same time, it's evil because you left it hanging. WHY. YOU BITCH. *now has to avoid all your other fans. Thanks a lot for tempting me.* x/ *cackles* I love all the little dark and foreboding hints you gave us as to what was happening beyond the "OMGSEX". It's always fun to find and cackle over in text clues. ONCE AGAIN, this chapter is EVIL because I KNOW something big is going to happen (only because I tackle you and torture you and do so many horrible things. Yah, rly.) and YOU JUST LEFT IT THERE.
WHY. WHY. WHHHHY. T__T
I hate you right now. Rly. No supper for you, do not pass "Go", do not collect $200. x/ I'll leave a more coherent (and maybe more constructive?) review after my brain stops going "NOOOOOOO DAMMIT" all over the place. xD
Great job! ♥
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*does not cackle, but is sorely tempted*
This is, perhaps, the ONLY cliffhanger I've ever INTENDED. Which is why it's so evil. And yes, big things from expected and unexpected places.
Because I'm EVIL.
Okay. I still have leftover pizza. [True story: I actually DID collect $200 for this! XD I typed up almost all of this uber-chapter while I was house-sitting, for which I was paid that amount. So. Rocking.]
*laughs* Man, you're going to HATE how long it's going to take for the rest to come out, I swear. Because, erm, the first few scenes of chapter 18 are KILLING ME DEAD in frustration.
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x/ And just because you haven't cackled doesn't mean you still aren't a horrible person. Methinks you're too happy about this. D:
DDD: That's not fair! You were supposed to collect money for being evil and you aren't supposed to have food. WRY IS THE WORLD AGAINST ME?!
*woe* Once again, you sound too happy about this, which probably means it's going to be just as evil.
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*insert totally malicious grin here for multiple reasons*
BECAUSE I'M EVIL.
Of course. Of course. Of course.
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Sorry for not replying to a couple of the previous chapters. Health issues have kept me from the computer. But I'm glad to be able to come back to this. So much love for Topping, Sub!Yami and bottoming Dom!Yuugi. I was kind of hoping you'd go in that direction for their relationship, since I feel it fits them very well.
And the smut was very well written. 8D Neither full of purple prose or crass language, but with a smooth flow. It was realistic as well, due to the uncomfortable moments and difficult pauses. xD Definitely makes for a yummy read.
Keep up the great work and I can't wait for the next chapter~
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It's perfectly all right! Health always comes first, and I remember you mentioning it before.
As to positions: I utterly see them switching all the time [as that's what people do], but for fic where you essentially need to get the 'quintessential, relationship-defining' sex, that sort of reversal appeals to me greatly with them. It doesn't even matter who's where, either. The thing that makes me sad is that I haven't seen ANYONE ELSE write this style, for this pairing.
YAY! This is, erm, actually my first foray into writing 'explicit material,' so the fact no one's telling me it's crap is making me very happy. To get compliments!
... and as soon as Dark Yuugi stops threatening to destroy the world and let me actually write the damn thing!
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Yes, I agree that Yuugi and Yami would switch positions, because their relationship would be focused on maintaining that eqaul balance. When I used to RP Yuugi while my friend RP'ed Atemu, we had them switch quite frequently. It's just logical that way. It's not healthy for a relationship to be the same all the time; it gets stagnent and boring which is not good at all. Nopenope.
I usually write Yami as someone topping physically, though write Yuugi as someone emotional more dominant. The only other person I've seen write something to that extent was Ocean. In her fics, Yuugi is definitely more assertive in regards to the physical relationships he's written in with Atemu. Yuugi dominates his other by submitting, because the submissive usually is the one with the most control. :3 (And that's why slash > yaoi).
Ahh... What would Dark Yami be without his occaisional homocidal tendencies?
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And even just writing/reading the same sex scenes over-and-over again gets boring. [And besides, with the two Yuugis, you can pretty much tell that after the first week or so of getting comfortable with sex, they are TOTALLY kicking up the kink factor. They've got at least half-a-dozen different sex games they got at shops ( ... )
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my brain was already in a state of complete meltdown and now I think it might never work coherently again.
That was just... ah.. oh.. wow.
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and then..
Kidnapped?!?!?
and a cliffhanger?
Eep, can't wait for the next one.
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*insert Kaiba-style diabolical laughter here*
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Hooray! it wasn't really intentional, but... score?
Corrected.
MAYBE TEN. WHO KNOWS? Hahahaha. I'm glad you liked it.
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*laughs* And considering how LONG it is!! *totally flattered*
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