Beta with Dom/Sub Experience Needed

[qweenmewwy]

Hi. I managed to write myself a Steve/Danny mild (more??) dom/sub story. Now I really need help because other than reading about dom/sub I have no experience in this field. So far it is 2 chapters (am writing and will finish chapter 2 shortly) long and it might grow. Depending on the muses. 
But I need help with the following:
     Dom/Sub relationships
     Tense work
     Grammer
And then anything else you might see. I do tend to sometimes miss words or go completely off in another direction. So any help would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you,
Mewwy