Alarmist Party: Monster Edition
This Party Post is for complaining, griping, and worrying about the mass extinction of monsters. Yes, if challenged, I have three "silver linings" to this phenomenon. Yes, I am fully ready to hear it if "No, Harp, see, Isaac Marion wrote a comedy/actually does it right/wrote something good so give it a chance/be lol-trollin" and even abandon my
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exercise just enough restraint to keep me alive to do it again. That's Ivan! "Blood pets" he calls them.
thoroughly interested in sex, and even if it's not their primary pleasure any more, That's old hedonist Ivan. Works out, too, 'cause he can be easily distracted by pleasing his senses. 'Caurse, that's also how he ended up stuck with his Idiot Fledgeling...
beg me to let them change me, so we can be together forever. That... would be Ivan, except he has had two lovers-turned already, and it ended so poorly both times, and he's been alive for so long (11th or 12th century) that he's got an understanding of just how long forever is. :I Actually, if you have any excerpts from your book about the Turning Discussion, I... ahh, maybe I shouldn't. I just need some kinda idea. 'Cause if he did ask her, right now she'd probably point out just how dangerous it could be.
((Confiding in you, plz feel free to skippit!)) I mean, she's terribly, terribly persuasive and cagey, manipulative even. She's spun things in crazy ways, it'd take a lotta words to explain, and done it in that especially sneaky way where the person thinks they came up with the idea themselves. So the first century or three might be fine, but time can really strip the humanity from a person. That kinda power with a maxed out charisma stat minus the morality compass... it might get messy.
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Vampire Byron is like that, too, although he's careful enough to keep it nearer the Red Cross guidelines -- actually he and Laura (yes, I named her Laura Aubrey, I am a little shit that way) had a cute extension of the safe sex discussion where they worked out a balance of less blood/more often and only brief tastes during the recovery period. (Feeding, if he chooses his moment right? Can induce extended orgasm. LIke, for the duration of it. So the balance is important!)
Byron is absolutely burnt out on 'forever', though. Back when he was human, Caroline fucking Lamb was supposed to be forever, or at least they said it a lot to each other during their affair, and their breakup was EPIC. He DOES NOT say 'forever'.
He's also not willing to discuss killing Laura if she gets old and decrepit. Shuts that RIGHT down.
I'm afraid it isn't a book -- it's a short story that hasn't hit the target 15K yet. Still a rough draft. But, if you'd like to see it, pm me your email address and I'll share the Google doc with you. I love feedback!
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I missed the reference, so it's new to me.
He's also not willing to discuss killing Laura if she gets old and decrepit.
That's also something I'm worried about. One of these days, she's not gonna be so young anymore, and unlike the Blood Pets they started out with in the first game (Alice and Chester) she's likely not going to get killed.
But, if you'd like to see it, pm me your email address and I'll share the Google doc with you. I love feedback!
And I want to say yes, but I'm afraid of 1) unwitting Osmosis (or is it diffusion?) and Plasmoptysis, 2) inadequate feedback (I am a matador of it), 3) annoying you when I fall off the face of the earth in May (that's when mortuary school resumes). Now if you had some discussion feedback questions you needed answered, like "I wrote this scene, what does this evoke?" and "in this argument, what are they saying and whose side are you taking, and what do you feel are the motives behind her argument? What? No, she wasn't trying to get his pity, she was trying to make him laugh, where did you get that?" and "What zodiac sign is this character and why?" well, I can do that. I do best with guidelines.
Any fule kno sex=babies
What's fule kno sex?
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The story doesn't exactly take the kind of questions you're proposing. Uncharacteristically for me, it's first person, Laura's POV, with a decidedly (deliberately) chick-lit flavor to it. And I think I can trust my beta to tell me if I make one tricky bit work -- in the third sex scene, which is an actual roleplay one instead of just accommodating vampire physiology, Laura is going to have to break fourth wall very near the start of it, because their roleplay is premised on Byron acting like a movie vampire with a strong basis in Bram Stoker's writing, and so his semi-scripted dialogue is going to sound CHEESY AS HELL, and Laura's "voiceover" will be explaining WHY they're using such cheesy dialogue, with a bit of lit-crit underpinning it. But I know I risk wrecking the momentum of the sex scene. I just feel like, on balance, I'd rather risk the digression and then return to SEXYTIMES than risk losing readers when they think "OMG WHO EVEN TALKS LIKE THAT" about the roleplay words. This is why I haven't written that part yet.
I won't be offended if some of my ideas seep into your RP, but if you don't want to risk muddling it, I'll understand.
Also, May is not an issue. I'm thinking it'll be done around next week.
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And he built a cynical shell around a hopelessly idealistic core, and you didn't have to dig deep to see the hurt, and he had a wicked sense of snarky humor, and so... despite his flaws and episodes of being an asshole, I'm a bit of a stan.
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