The steps of recovery; PG-13; 1/?

[hangoverday]

Key was the first one to arrive to the small room with five chairs arranged as a circle in the middle. The walls were painted white and covered with motivational posters like “You’re not alone with your problems!” and “One step at a time!” Key wrinkled his nose in disgust. Two minutes in the room and he already wanted to leave. It’s not like

Comments

[linnhe]

Ugh I love that Jonghyun is completely blonde and that Taemin is 18.

I had a little trouble getting into your fic at first because of slightly awkward phrases (is this the honesty you wanted? :D) but I'm seriously telling the truth when I say that I actually forgot I was reading a fic halfway through. I was just nodding my head and agreeing with Key. Your portrayal of Key's thoughts are so lifelike. I'm very interested in where this is going /hops on to next chapter

[hangoverday]

Yes this is very much the kind of honesty I wanted! Do you think you could point out some sentences because I'm not quite sure exactly what you mean?

/hops on to reply at the other comments

[dainty_empress]

Sure, but keep in mind that English is like my 3rd language so I could just as easily be pointing out things that are correct and are only weird to me;

Key let his eyes wander around the other boy.
over the boy? I don't know

He had big, dark eyes and he looked like some sort of athletic.
athlete?

’s okay, Taemin.
I know you made this contraction on purpose but it still seemed a bit weird to me

Now that we’re all know each other by name
I didn't think 'are' was needed here

After that I start falling in love with the story so I don't want to analyze anymore /useless :D

[hangoverday]

Are you trying to confuse me with two journals? (beause it's working). no but thank you thank you thank you for pointing those out. I mean how come haven't I moticed them before. I might be too lazy to correct them but still it's good that someone points out my mistakes.

You're so not useless gosh I love your comments :D

[linnhe]

Are you trying to confuse me with two journals? (beause it's working)

I'm really not, sorry about that -_- linnhe is my fic journal and I log onto that to post/edit fics and dainty_empress is my regular journal so I log onto that to read all my communities and friend's pages and the like

I usually only comment with my regular journal tho, I'm just busy editing an unpublished chapter and I keep forgetting to swap accounts

And haha at you not even editing them out like a boss B)