a poem

[gloomanddoom]

here's a poem i just wrote i think its' good but im not sure

next thing i will post it in one of those poetry commnities to see what people think but i hope they like it i am sensitive about my poety...also i hope no 1 plagarizes it so here goes:

DEATH

once upon a time there wasa a princes

in hell who  wore a black dress

she was a gothic princess

Comments

[blackphoenix524]

It's a good poem, I like it :) A little depressing, yes, but then it reflects the world these days well.

[gloomanddoom]

thanx! i fell so happy! it does show the world today realy caus the world realy sucx today. especially caus sorrow & people hating everything & being rejected & drowned prostutes only happens now i dont think it happened in the past. only since i was born becaus my life sucks.

[blackphoenix524]

Oh it most certainly happened in the past, indeed things were a lot worse in the past :) However these days people are a lot more aware of it and there's a lot more media exposure of world suffering.

[gloomanddoom]

i think people always knew they just never cared cause people are selfish like my mom always tells me but realy shes selfish caus she wants every1 to be PERFEC!!!

[blackphoenix524]

Well perfection doesn't exist, for a start :)
Yup, people are selfish, I think it's a part of human nature to be selfish.

[gloomanddoom]

:(

[blackphoenix524]

Yeah, I know :(