HSN Exchange Fic: The Sun Never Sets (2/2), for neimans

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Title: The Sun Never Sets (2/2)
Rating: NC-17
Pairings/Characters: Puck/Rachel, Santana, Brittany (implied Santana/Puck, Santana/Brittany)
Warnings: N/A
Word count: ~7000 (total ~15,700)
Disclaimer: This Glee fanfiction is based upon the television show of the same name. All characters and situations other than my own are sole property of Ryan Murphy

Comments

[andbless_mybaby]

HOLY FUCKING SHIT.
HOLY FUCKING SHIT
HOLY FUCKING SHIT

This was insanely hella good.

I ~loved~ Santana in this, that crazy bitch. I adored the backstory with Sue's diary and how you spun it out so gradually throughout the story. Your patience for storytelling gives you away, bb. You have this way of spinning a yarn that keeps me hooked through 15k+ epic words, eagerly anticipating the smut bomb that I just know is coming.

THINGS I LOVED
1.) MILF Patrol. Oh, dear god. I almost never say this, but that demands a sequel. I want my P/R/S threesome, goddammit.
2.) Rachel's complete ineptitude in seducing Puck, despite the fact that - as Santana pointed out - his "yes" is pretty much a foregone conclusion.
3.) B & S making out all over town.
4.) "This is what it's like when I allow you to touch my breasts" = Best Line Award

[andbless_mybaby]

Well, darling. I'm glad you seemed to have enjoyed it. LOL.

Drat! I knew I should've been more stealthy, lol.

Truthfully, halfway through writing this, Santana started to steal the show for me, As much as I love Puck, as much as I love Rachel and as much as I love them together, it was a struggle to keep it from becoming the Santana Show. (I love Santana too, so I wasn't too ~worried about it, lol)

1. MILF PATROL! I think this is my greatest moment of inspiration ever. /ego. I don't know about a sequel (especially at the moment) but who knows? and you know me. 3somes are my fav
2. LOL. I can't really see Rachel being a successful seductress at this moment in time, even after dating both Jesse and Finn. I'm glad it worked for you.
3. YOU KNOW THEY WOULD
4. ♥
5. The possibility of their dynamic has always intrigued me (I not so secretly ship it, but I would adore if they became best frenemies forever on the show)

Thank you so much bb! ♥

[comeundone]

I loved this. It was really well written and I liked how both Santana and Rachel brought down Sue using her journal (I had no idea that was the journal you were talking about!) Rachel was very in character and I like how she kind of admitted that maybe she always wanted Puck, she was just too blindsided by everything else to see it. As for Puck's feelings, I kind of feel like any intense ones were left untold... but I got the idea that he almost gave up on Rachel and was surprised that she wanted what he could have possibly wanted for a while. I liked the whole dynamic between them and how she forced a friendship between them. I liked Santana and Britney's relationship too and how Puck didn't realize that the two of them were getting more serious. You definitely filled the prompt to a tee and my favorite part was Rachel with the condom, how she wanted to try to put it on herself. Oh, Rachel.

[comeundone]

Thank you! I'm super glad you enjoyed it. I think Rachel's a character that thinks she knows what she wants (her dreams, her leading man, her Tony awards, etc) and doesn't really pay attention to the things that she does want. (i.e Puck).

I wanted to tell this story in a really tight Rachel POV, mostly because I wanted the motives of everyone else to be ambiguous. Why is Santana doing this? Does Puck really have feelings for Rachel, and like you said, gave up after a while? my headcanon for this story agrees with you, btw

I adore the part with Rachel and the condom. I'm glad you did, too. Thank you so much for the lovely comment! ♥

[neimans]

Oh, thank you so much! This story was absolutely perfect. You didn't just put it all out there with stealing Sue's diary, it was nice to have something to keep reading and searching for. I love Santana and Rachel as frenimies, so it made me super excited you picked this prompt to write. And when Puck and Rachel did get together - totally perfect! Seriously, I can't think of a better story, you did amazing!

And I totally support the idea of a sequel that includes a P/R/S threesome!!

[neimans]

I enjoyed writing this quite a bit (my beta may say otherwise, but you're not to believe her) and I'm really happy with how it turned out. It's great that you're happy with it, too. I'm not a fan of information dumps in stories - I try to avoid them - so I'm glad that worked for you!

I think the dynamic between Santana and Rachel as frenemies would be excellent, too (I was drawn to this prompt almost immediately, though I did toy with the other two as well. I think the idea of writing that dynamic was the clincher)

I don't know about a sequel, but I'm not ruling out the possibility! Thank you!

[snoozin81]

Three things I love in no particular order,

1. Puck/Rachel
2. Puck/Santana
3. Santana/Rachel friendship

What gives me all three in one place?

Your fic!

You've managed to capture all four characters so perfectly as well as their friendships and rivalries. The smut was HOT! and the plot was lovely also. I liked the setting too. This whole thing was really just all around fantastic.

On another note, I totally third the P/R/S threesome!

[snoozin81]

NGL, I love those three things very much, too. I'm really glad all four of the characters and their dynamics read right to you (my lovely beta could tell you about all my OOC notes in the margins of the copy I sent her) and
I'm really glad you enjoyed this (and like I said to others, I have no plans for a sequel, but who knows?) and thank you so much for the lovely comment! ♥

[abluegirl]

I really enjoyed this story - Santana makes an excellent co-conspirator for Rachel, and everybody is so very, very in character. ♥

I love this detail:
Rachel stands there in her underwear and bra and has a brief moment of panic. They don't match. They should match for her first time. She feels herself flush with the embarrassment of it all, looking at her feet and playing with the ends of her hair.
I can just imagine Puck watching this and interpreting this as blushing virgin shyness, instead of Rachel being worried about not matching. This amuses me.

I'd love to read this same story from Puck's perspective. I'd dearly love to know what is going on in his mind in this story. Am I reading too much into it by thinking that he was really into her the whole time? Because the line "If you're fucking with me-" really makes me think that perhaps he was, but had given up on her long ago

[abluegirl]

I do so love the possible dynamic between Santana and Rachel. I think they could be the bizarrest co-conspirators/frenemies/whatnot ever (and I ship them a little too, lol) and there is definitely a strong probability of some serious lulzy behavior

[ophelia1234]

I completely agree about seeing this from Puck's perspective! I'm DYING to know what was going through his head the whole time.