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[adommy_forever]

Originally posted by adommy_foreverat post
T- Tommy            Hannah- News person 1
A- Adam             Taylor- News person 2
M- Monte            Juli- News person 3
C- Ciera              TR- Tommy's Roomate

Let's Begin

TR- *bursts into tommy's room* Wheres your half of the rent?
T- Sorry dude i'll get it to you soon
TR- maybe if u got off ur lazy ass once in a while

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[snow_cherries]

Since you asked for people's opinion, I have to say I'm pretty confused by this. Why use initials? Why only dialog? What's with the asterisks? Why is it in text speech rather than proper English? It looks more like a quick, rough draft than a story. I wouldn't read more.

[adommy_forever]

Ok, thank you for your opinion