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genesisgrey

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Nov 29, 2006 20:37

I got addicted to the 1sentence community. So, I decided to do a Gravitation one for, and I know this will shock everyone, Mika and Tohma. I attempted to make it a coherent bit of writing, and succeeded in parts and not so much in other. :P

Anyway, rated T for naughty implications and use of the word 'sex'.

( Mika and Tohma, 50 sentences, Epsilon Set )

gravitation, sentences, fanfic

Comments 10

imayb1 November 30 2006, 06:53:53 UTC

The 30-34 lines kind of throw-off the overall theme but I'm really impressed. Was it hard to link all those bits together? Interesting writing exercise. Do you plan to shape this into something more, like a one-shot or chaptered fic? I love the desperation of the characters, here.

genesisgrey December 1 2006, 07:34:01 UTC

It was more difficult than I thought it would be, which is why some of those lines don't quite fit. (Sing nearly killed me. :P ) I'm not sure if I'm going to make this into something more. I want to write something for Mika and Tohma, 'cause I haven't in a while, but I just don't know what.... Though I have been wondering about their kid recently.

imayb1 December 2 2006, 05:27:38 UTC

Yes, I can see "sing" was a tough one to fit in!

I have been wondering about their kid, too. I was really hoping MM would throw us a bone in the webtracks, but it seems those are on hold until she has finished her doujinshi.

genesisgrey December 2 2006, 22:31:11 UTC

Have Mika or the child been mentioned at all?

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lirren November 30 2006, 14:40:54 UTC

Wow! That was really good. I can see this being exactly the way Mika and Tohma relate to each other behind closed doors. It always interested me that Tohma still calls his wife Mika-san. That just seems so formal for a married couple, although maybe that's just my ignorance of Japanese customs.

genesisgrey December 1 2006, 07:46:37 UTC

Thank you :) I'm not entierly sure about how much formality is 'normal' (and I think it really depends on who and what generation you're asking), but Tohma as formal with Mika as he is everyone else..... and I love it!

bitterfig November 30 2006, 15:57:19 UTC

I really liked this. Too often the relationship between Tohma and Mika is dismissed or ignored entirely but their really captured the strong and ambiguous feelings that exist between them.

genesisgrey December 1 2006, 07:42:39 UTC

I love your icon so much! :)

Glad to hear you enjoyed. :) The relationship between Mika and Tohma is probably my favorite part of Gravitation, and it makes me sad it isn't written/mentioned about more often. Ambiguous, now there is a good word for it.