Bricks in the Wall, Chapter 23: No Retaliation
Title: No Retaliation
Characters: Peter, Sylar
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Violent sex, coercion during sex, possible dub-con. Peter gets really dark.
Word count: 7,000
Setting: The Wall.
Summary: Peter tries to resist Sylar’s advances, but his own darkest desires betray him.
Notes: Beta by means2bhuman. Set a few days after a fist fight between the two of ( Read more... )
Peter lay half propped up, his fingers tracing the bruises and bite marks that littered Sylar’s jaw, neck and upper chest. The guy had a couple on his back, too, one on his arm and another decorating a butt cheek. Other than a few possible bruises, Peter was untouched. “Do you mind? These marks?”
“No.”
Peter smiled faintly, frightened by what he was becoming. “I’ve never done this to anyone.” His eyes went up to Sylar’s, which were steady and unbothered by the surprising violence of Peter’s passion. He seemed serene - utterly fulfilled by the use he was being put to.
“I’m glad,” Sylar said in one of his customary plurisignifications.
That was my favorite scene. Possessive!Peter is a fave of mine, as you know. So what does that word mean, that I am convinced you made up? ;-)
“I might have my mouth down here later. Need you squeaky clean.” Sylar’s befuddled expression was priceless.
RFLMAO!!
Peter had a lot of anger that he’d been keeping buried in the interests of being civil. Intimacy was stripping that away, fast. He wanted to hurt Sylar.
That’s an interesting idea that intimacy would make it hard for Peter to hide his anger. I read somewhere that men are most honest when they’re in bed, even if they are complete liars the rest of the time. It's like sex and truth are connected somehow. Or for Peter, being sexually intimate equates to emotional intimacy (and of course it does for him) and with that comes a certain level of honesty, even when the truth hurts, literally. What's great is that Sylar is willing to put up with a little pain to get that honesty.
And yes there were a few dark places; some serious complexity with Sylar's past and Peter's issues; and then the love/lie/slap moment, but it wasn’t at all what I was expecting. This was very romantic, I thought. Well, romantic, hot, real, dirty, harsh, gritty, and sex on a stick.
As far as pacing goes (slow, fast, slow, fast...) - very cool. I liked this style a lot. And even though time moves much faster at the end, it doesn't feel rushed at all. The climax is Peter giving into his feelings, not the actual sex. So an abbreviated resolution is completely fitting.
Also, I like the in media res aspect of it.
One last thing - "unbearable tongue" was great!
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When I write Peter, he says what he means to the extent that he understands himself (which is usually pretty good). He means one thing when he says it and if optional interpretations are possible, he tends not to mean them. 'I did not mean it that way' is a common thing for Peter.
When I write Sylar, what he says often has layers of meaning. If the words can mean more than one thing, then he probably means it both ways. It's how he expresses ambivalence. He likes to play with words as much as with anything else (abilities, people, roles, etc.) Sylar doesn't always understand his own motivations, though.
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