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Mar 07, 2012 18:41

Make It Smoke (2/2)

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deathlygrenade March 8 2012, 17:34:21 UTC
Whoa.. this could use a kinky coda. *nods* yup yup yup!

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gala_apples March 12 2012, 22:51:07 UTC
It doesn't have a kinky coda (yet), but I did originally chat this out as Gerard pov, so I have an opening scene in GWay's experience.

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deathlygrenade March 13 2012, 01:25:53 UTC
Oooohh... sounds good. :D

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viviansface March 8 2012, 21:49:55 UTC
I loved this so, so fucking much. I can't really express myself, I'm just *incoherent noises* Wow. THE THINGS I'M FEELING ( ... )

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gala_apples March 13 2012, 03:48:03 UTC
Your praise makes me feel so happy! I wanted Frank's kinks to be real without making the entire thing be about sex. I'm glad it struck such a nerve with you.

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carmesim March 9 2012, 02:09:13 UTC
Oh man, I just couldn't believe my luck when I realized it was YOU writing for my prompt! You have such a unique, realistic way to tell a story, most of whatever I know about kink actually comes from reading your work and then trying to find out more about it. So I absolutely loved this fic; how you built up Frank and Gerard's relationship, the fact that this is almost like a fairy tale about Frank being rescued by his dom in shining armour (if you don't mind me calling it that), I really wanted to punch Zeke in the nose by end of that first part ( ... )

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gala_apples March 13 2012, 04:23:38 UTC
Dom in shining armour is a PERFECT way to put it. Frank falls in love with a concept of Gerard before they negotiate for a safer version of him. I liked writing Frank basically unchanging as Gerard betters himself. So often in D/s fics it's the sub that changes himself for the Dom's every whim, but I wanted that to be a no-go from the beginning with Zeke and continue through.

I hadn't planned on having your drawn scene so late in the fic. I initally imagined a F/G floundering a bit in F+G's world. I just really needed to have F/G's dynamic set up perfectly before they met F+G, and that kept taking longer and longer. By the time I was there, it didn't seem like I needed a whole nother half a story with them living in our world.

THIS WAS A MUTUALLY BENEFICIAL RELATIONSHIP :D

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kopperblaze March 10 2012, 17:09:39 UTC
omg i loved this so much!!!! all the characters in it were perfect and the frank/gerard dynamic just *____* and i laughed SO much at the frerard and lj :D

<3333

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gala_apples March 13 2012, 03:59:53 UTC
El Jay has a lot of opinions about Frank and Gerard kissing :D

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theletterelle March 11 2012, 02:40:49 UTC
Otter’s reply is casual, Gerard’s isn’t. “Pull over or I will kick you in the face.”

Not much to say about this, other than I like it. :)

He’s not in the coveted passenger seat anymore, turned around to get a hand on Frank’s knee. He’s not even in the space between the front seats. Instead he’s got the van door open, cold December air blowing in around him. He’s lit by orange neon. “Wake up, I’m booking an hour.”

Wow, I can totally see and feel this. That grimy sleeping-sitting-up feeling, being cold inside the car but freezing outside, everything weird colors from the neon of the low-rent motel.

I love the scene they do in the hotel on the pink carpeting. :) And then WHOA FAN FREAKOUT. Yay for advice from future!selves! I love all Gerards. :)

Great job, hon. As always, so much fun to read.

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gala_apples March 13 2012, 04:14:49 UTC
I've only been to three stars myself, but I like the idea of a grimy ass motel. I imagine they occured a lot in our band's first days.

Seriously, if you saw them casually buying coffee you'd probably have that OMG YOU'RE YOU!!! moment. Even with all the meet and greets you've had to desensitize you.

Gerard Way just has a lot of ~opinions~.

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