[Sporking] The Plus One of RWBY - Chapter 10 part 4
Note from Fufu: I'm sorry its taken so long for this to go up. Part of it was that college was finishing up for me so I wanted to focus on the work I still had left to do, then the other week, myself and Kirby were busy trying to finish up chapter 11 and call that done. Hope that's okay~. Now enjoy the remains of Chapter 10. Or maybe not cause its
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Then there's the way it's delivered. The emphasis on why it's tragic is because he had to pretend he was okay when he had no friends because of his social anxiety. Which he can actually do something about this to not make it a problem (in both cases, but for this I'm focusing on the pretending to be fine part). However, there's nothing actually stopping him from not pretending he's fine with it. This doesn't make him a good victim when I can say "well just stop telling people you're fine" and it's actually as easy as that.
But that's not all. He finally does just man up and stop shutting himself up, and from how he describes it, it really was that damned easy. He just had to realise it was stupid one day, and suddenly, not a problem!
Then we go onto details about how he had friends and apparently he was the unfavourite - which could actually be shown as the true problem of this "tragic backstory" but it never was the focus. However he talks of this as the "bright" side and not in the "I had it worse than before this is good because I didn't know I could do better" tragedy, but because he fails to actually realise that this is where he should highlight as a problem. In fact, this problem here could mesh better with Pyrrha's issue.
For example, what if he went into a brief sum up of how he was too shy and socially awkward to make friends. Then when he pushed himself to come out more, he made one friend. And that friend had introduced him to a group of friends. Then this became a problem because none of them liked him. And he knew this because of how they spoke to him... drop some examples of where they asked him to do something embarrassing like streaking across campus, or pulled a prank on him that he really did not appreciate. But he did it all with a smile and acted like it was fine because he wanted them to like him.
Then he could give the message that "But then I realised that they were never going to like me, and it was only hurting me to pretend like I was okay with that. If I never told them how I really felt about it, then how could I expect them to respect me as a person?" and try to convince Pyrrha that she should be honest not because it'd win Jaune over, but because she needs to let it out so it'll stop hurting her to have to sit back and act like she's okay with Jaune talking about his feelings for Weiss in front of her.
TLDR; THE STUTHOR CANNOT FUCKING WRITE A TRAGIC BACKSTORY IF IT SMACKED HIM IN THE FACE WITH A FRYING PAN.
they started making out, that went on for what was probably a long time
How is it going on for a long time? You're not being really specific, so I can only assume that you're French kissing and not much else. But even then you're gonna need to come up for air after about a minute. Not to mention, eventually, that's going to get boring.
Yang sighed when she left. "Oh well, at least their shipping worked out, wonder how Nora is doing with the Arkos ship?"
"Did someone say shipping?!" Ozpin asked excitedly. He was crouched in the window…
This joke with both of them, is not funny. Not one bit. How many times did the Stuthor get hit with the Stupid Stick before he finally thought making Yang and Ozpin crazy shippers was a good idea?
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Calling the department of forced conflict. One of your rejected plot lines have escaped the trash heap and worked itself into a fic. Please terminate the fic before the contamination spreads.
"AAAGGGH!" AJ yelled in annoyance that Yang wouldn't just leave them alone.
I'm surprised he didn't try to kill Yang.
[insert the entire fucking fight scene where they try to catch him but fail]
What bugs me here is how the girls are clearly trying to just catch him, but Boy is attacking back. He's kicking, using his aura, throwing them at each other. Whereas, except for one moment where Yang got pissed off, they've only tried to tackle him and restrain him. With a friend like him, who needs enemies?
"I realized when you convinced Blake that I was going to end up going to the stupid dance so I decided to have you guys chase me everywhere as punishment." AJ said smiling.
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*holds Blake back so Yang can resume her attempt to punch Boy*
What the fuck is wrong with this boy?! Yang was the only one pushing for him to attend the dance. What did Ruby, Weiss or Blake do?! Not once have we've seen either of them try to convince Boy to go to the dance. So what the hell did those three do to deserve being punished?!
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