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[forest_quitting]

Once upon a time
a man was created
assembled in his prime
undying yet ill-fated
his master’s unfinished plans,
his life’s work abandoned
the substitute proved permanent
left with only scissors for hands.

Lonely in my castle
hours bathed in silence
still I find it facile
whiling in innocence
to take joy in simple things
a burst of movement, a

Comments

[aureantes]

Now that there's some actual dialogue here, it's important to use the proper form for embedding it in a sentence....such as:

"Bollocks to all your fine plans," she said, "if ever they see the light of day--that's no way to treat a wallaby!"

"I don't care," he retorted coyly, twirling his moustaches. "The Prime Minister and his mistresses be damned."

"Then go broil them yourself..." she muttered under her breath, "and leave me to my purloined greens and ale."

"Believe me, Agnes, I would if I could." He walked over to the window and looked down pensively on Piccadilly Circus. "Have you no thought for the millions of poor starving cannibals in this lonely world?"

That meaning, of course, that if the sentence continues on straightaway, a comma is employed (if there is no other punctuation overriding it, such as --?...!) and any immediately-following pronoun is uncapitalized. If a full stop occurs either in speech or in action, then a new (and capitalized) sentence begins after

Chapter 2 comments

[anonymous]

Notes on Chapter 2