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Once upon a time
a man was created
assembled in his prime
undying yet ill-fated
his master’s unfinished plans,
his life’s work abandoned
the substitute proved permanent
left with only scissors for hands.
Lonely in my castle
hours bathed in silence
still I find it facile
whiling in innocence
to take joy in simple things
a burst of movement, a ( Read more... )
"Bollocks to all your fine plans," she said, "if ever they see the light of day--that's no way to treat a wallaby!"
"I don't care," he retorted coyly, twirling his moustaches. "The Prime Minister and his mistresses be damned."
"Then go broil them yourself..." she muttered under her breath, "and leave me to my purloined greens and ale."
"Believe me, Agnes, I would if I could." He walked over to the window and looked down pensively on Piccadilly Circus. "Have you no thought for the millions of poor starving cannibals in this lonely world?"
That meaning, of course, that if the sentence continues on straightaway, a comma is employed (if there is no other punctuation overriding it, such as --?...!) and any immediately-following pronoun is uncapitalized. If a full stop occurs either in speech or in action, then a new (and capitalized) sentence begins after.
This will make it a good deal easier to keep dialogue flowing-&-tensing naturally rather than resorting to scriptlike sparseness...not to mention making it just a lot more fun to write as well.
I'm quite curious as to what really passes through Mrs. Ashton's mind when she sees Melora, and I do hope we get to find out at some point -- afterall, strange white-haired girls in old-fashioned dresses don't exactly give much clue of themselves or what they are or might be, even when sitting on one's front lawn.
Oh, that reminds me....in the interests of subject-consistency, one should keep one's neutral terms and pronouns as closely linked as possible, even though the use of "they/themself/their" as a singular neutral pronoun-set is very widespread currently and undermining the old formalities. At very least, don't mix them and say things like "One must always remember to brush their teeth before bed" -- it's either "...one's teeth" or "People must always..."
Hope that helps and amuses.....I shall be back Tuesday night; in the meantime I'm sure that Litharriel will be good at fishing out (:-|...) things to focus on.
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