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Hetalia-- The Game

Oct 20, 2009 21:14

Series: Hetalia
Title: The Game
Author: Fictatious
Character(s) Pairing(s): Russia/Prussia
Rating: R -- oh noes!
Warnings: Angry hate-sex
Summary: Gilbert hates trips to Moscow.

( Gilbert cursed as he stepped out of the car and into a puddle of slush. )

Comments 27

kuro_ko October 21 2009, 16:07:33 UTC

OMFG I love this so much great writing by the way! ♥♥♥

fictatious October 21 2009, 16:15:33 UTC

Yay! A review! I woke up and went "... Nothing? But it's been there for, like, 8 hours!" I've gotten spoilt by the Hetalia community's fast response time... And I guess I've never posted a fic as late before. I'm so happy you liked it! I always find smutty scenes a bit awkward to write...

getawaycar_x October 21 2009, 17:09:01 UTC

This was great =) And even if you migh have felt awkward writing the smutty part, it sure didn't show in the fic'. The writing was great through and through. Nothing awkward there except the situation they were in XD Yay for passive-agressive hate sex!
And I really liked the end where, despite everything, Gilbert walks away with a small victory of his own and his pride at least somewhat intact. Psssh Ivan, obviously if you care you lose!
I thought that bit of sentimentality to Ivan was really in-character. I've always thought of him as having these layers. That beneath the pleasant smile there's the crazy creepy side, and even further beneath that there's someone who's just really horribly lonely. And beneath that... well I dunno, but you get my point ( ... )

fictatious October 21 2009, 17:32:30 UTC

*happy dance!* Reviews can never be TL;DR ( ... )

getawaycar_x October 21 2009, 18:06:28 UTC

Vague smut is the best smut! Well, not vague per se but vague about the actual mechanics of it all and focusing on all the other stuff going on instead. Especially descriptions of the...sounds certain body parts make is something I'd gladly just skip. A while ago I read a fic where the author at the end notes apologized about going too much into the characters' feelings and other things during the smut. Like it was a bad thing letting that take the spot light. Which had me going "What, are you kidding? that was gold." So yeah, I definitely don't mind when that stuff is glossed over.
Well, ever since that comic strip with Russia, America and Lithuania where Russia goes "He is my ex after all," that's been my image of him too ( ... )

fictatious October 21 2009, 21:52:46 UTC

What if the descriptions of the sounds are hilariously awesome? "Like someon stepped in a bucket of wet play-doh" or something... A bit of it, besides just not wanting to slow down the rythem with buzz-words is just the idea of leaving to the imagination. Everybody's got a different idea of sexy, so letting the reader fill in their own details leaves them happier with it in the end. I called the way I was righting it a "road-map" and then the reader makes up the details ( ... )

whak_hat October 21 2009, 18:11:12 UTC

YES! Kick that Commie's ass!

Awesome and hot!

fictatious October 21 2009, 21:53:23 UTC

Hahahaha

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fictatious October 21 2009, 21:54:09 UTC

Ooh! Sweet! That's all acomplishmenty!

prussiablue October 21 2009, 21:12:24 UTC

Uh... I actually don't know what to say... I liked it.
I think you did an awesome job, both were so in character...

And... well, everything else has kinda been said by others, so... I'll just stay with that =)
AWESOME!

fictatious October 21 2009, 21:56:19 UTC

<3 The props encourage me whether they have con-crit or not. They make me go "Oh yay! Well recieved!" and makes me feel more confident about writing more things.

prussiablue October 21 2009, 22:04:17 UTC

I would appreciate that =D

fictatious October 21 2009, 22:33:56 UTC

Well I appreciat... uh... YOUR FACE! or something...