Fanfic: Degrees of Love

[fauxpocky]

Title: Degrees of Love
Pairing: Essentially House/Wilson
Word Count: 2502
Rating:PG
Spoilers: References to Control, Love Hurts, and Honeymoon through to Need to Know.
Author's Notes: Parts of this were quite difficult. I'm not used to writing some of these POVs and several of them I don't like writing, they clash too much with my own opinions of

Comments

[asynca]

This is brilliant! A uniquely executed idea, and very subtly written.

Can I make a few suggestions? If not, stop reading here...

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I think Wilson would probably think of House as "House" rather than Greg. I think Stacy would probably think of Wilson as "James".

Some of House's thoughts on Wilson are a little too tell and not enough show. I don't know if House would be so clear on his feelings about Wilson to be able to suggest that Wilson is the only one who gets his genuine smiles? Even if he is, I think you can be more roundabout in the way you convey this to the audience.

[fauxpocky]

Suggestions are always welcome *g* Especially when they're all so sensible *goes to correctt hings*

I think I was writing "Greg" because I've spent so much time working on "Dreams" lately that it was automatic, but this is a pre-slash, so I think you're right, "House" is more appropriate. And you're right about Stacy as well, she only calls him Wilson when she's talking to Greg. This is the first piece I've written from her POV and I found it a bit difficult. It's hard to write someone I dislike.

And I hadn't really gone over the House part, I only finished it last night and I was just so glad to get it done that I spellchecked and posted. But I think you're right, he isn't that obvious even in his own head.

I'm glad you liked it anyway, though *g*

[fatalisticrebel]

I guessed on Wilson being 360 degrees once I saw that Stacy was 90 degrees. However, I didn't think the next step - that House would be 0 degrees. I love this idea.

On the other hand, there were two small typos I picked up. I don't think many people would pay attention, if they weren't so neurotic like I am. Here they are:

-1- James had been concerned for her affect on Greg, but assured her that he was doing as well as he would let himself these days.\

I think that the affect should be effect. Here, the word is used as a noun, and since affect is a verb, it should be effect, which is a noun.

-2- James had been so concerned about her affect on him, why hadn't he noticed the bitterness, the drive for revenge?

Same thing here which the affect/effect thing.

Anyway, once again, I love it. I must go read it again.

[fauxpocky]

Eep, my bad *fixes*

The interesting thing in the development of this one is that I got the title almost before I'd started, but it wasn't till I'd finished the first section that the angles actually occurred to me. It just all seemed to fit into place, somehow.

Thanks for the comment and for catching those mistakes for me *g*

[gawainesangel]

I loved that you had Cameron keep the corsage House gave her on the date -- it's a perfect little detail that's probably true! And it actually made her easier for me to relate to -- it's a very human thing to keep mementos from past relationships. Although it does admittedly make me think of myself as a 6th grader more than as a grown woman, as Cameron obviously is. (Which is exactly why -- to me -- you nailed her character perfectly right there. She's just pitifully naive

[fauxpocky]

Keeping the corsage struck me as something that Cameron would do. I'm a bit of a hoarder myself, and I've kept far less significant things from people I wasn't even obsessed with *g* Her initial refusal to accept that House isn't interested in her made me want to slap her, because I've run into people with that determination in the past, and it's incredibly awkward for the person they're fixated on