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Terse Verse Tuesday

Sep 13, 2011 20:51

title: Just Ice
pairing: Harry/Draco
rating: R
words: 260
warnings: psychologically dark; controlling behavior
summary: Harry can play champion, because when the day is done, his secret little paradise awaits.

( Corner hooks pulling up his polite hammock smile )

~terse verse tuesday, *harry/draco, !poetry

Comments 4

And I, hooked inevitably when I saw that first line as the LJ cut dulcemia September 14 2011, 03:57:22 UTC

This is not, as is probably evident, my H/D, but that doesn't diminish my admiration of either your conceptualizations of them individually and as a (here, deeply dysfunctional) couple, or the poem qua poem. This Draco, this Endorphin bride./Man-wife Azkaban orphan prize drinking broken justice and reduced to nothing more than an it is a Draco I want to shove my arm into the poem and rescue. So it's no small thing to have wielded language so competently that someone who finds a dehumanized Draco and puppeteer Harry unpleasant to contemplate will still read the results multiple times for the sheer textual pleasure. (But god, those last two stanzas. *Ouch ( ... )

Re: And I, hooked inevitably when I saw that first line as the LJ cut exx_cecilegr September 14 2011, 20:27:44 UTC

I wasn't expecting to have this one finished this week. Once I realized I had indeed finally finished it, I threw my hands in the air and cheered, "YES!". :) I was thrilled to share it and I'm glad you like it. There are a few lines I'm unsure about and might yet tinker with, but all the ones you alluded are ones that have been written and ready for ages, sitting private-locked in my LJ, waiting waiting waiting to see the light of day!

I want to rescue Draco too! There were a few notable fics in my mind while writing this, that take on a similar scenario and have devastating endings. They always leave me wildly imagining more happy conclusions. I find the wild imaginings to be part of the fun.

This was an exciting exploration into strange territory... I don't even know what "kind of poem" to call this, but I hope I can only improve when I decide to write more like it in the future.

As always, thank you for sharing your thoughts. <3

enchanted_jae September 15 2011, 00:20:24 UTC

That gives me shivers--creepy and well done!

exx_cecilegr September 16 2011, 00:51:01 UTC

Thanks!