Chasing the Wind

[emo_snl]

   The turquoise sea sparkled in the sun, seagulls circled overhead, and the large square sail pulled fitfully, propelling the ship along. The crewmembers relaxed at their oar benches, trying to enjoy every moment of not rowing to the utmost. Jason stood near the steersman in the stern, watching the green hilly coast slide by to their right. He

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[d0gs]

I loved this so much, especially the ending!

[emo_snl]

Thanks! My plan for this account this season was to retall stories from Thomas Malory's Le Morte de Arthur in my own way (namely reconciling them with reality a bit more), but when I saw this topic, and racked my brain for hunger related Morte d'Arthur stories, I was coming up blank, until I remembered I'd previously been doing the same with the Argonautica and there was a story therein that dealt very specifically with hunger! (:

[karmasoup]

I like this! I'm definitely down for more!

[emo_snal]

I've had it vaguely in my mind for awhile, hence the other two Argonautica retellings, but I've actually become reobsessed after writing this and have been spending much of my free time thinking about it and/or doing related background research (:

[rayaso]

Jason and the Argonauts is one of my favorite Greek myths. Great job!

[estelle]

This was like a mini vacation including a stroll across the old market place when the local storyteller wants to share. Thank you!

One small problem

[baron_waste]

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/OK

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_proposed_etymologies_of_OK

Re: One small problem

[halfshellvenus]

Yes-- and in some of the earlier stories, too. You have to be careful about modern language in historical fiction, so readers don't get whiplash.

[emo_snal]

But the writing is assumed translation from ancient Greek and presumably they had a short casual affirmation which would be translated to "okay" without having to make a big deal about it hey?

“Ten-Four!”

[baron_waste]

presumably they had a short casual affirmation

Which would not be a 20th-century Americanism that breaks the setting, is my point.

"I agree," he said.  Idas was considered almost prophetic in his wisdom.

It's your story, but you'd hear this from just about any editor and it's an easy fix.