I really love the first part, with Kate's thoughts about where she's being held in relation to jail. How breaking down would mean that Wayne would have loved.
I also love what you did with the Desmond part. Rare is it that I pick stuff centered on him as a favorite, but I'm just in love with the format of both the letters and the observations, very much like reports we would actually see.
Thank you! It's nice to know when a less favoured character for the reader makes an impression. You've done that for me with your Juliet characterizations.
how true! so many of them have been trapped/captive. I love how you fleshed those up. My favorite is definitely Desmond's (I love his letter to Penny, but omg, the logbook is awesome!). but all of them bring great insight! lovely fic! :)
Thanks! I had planned a separate story dealing with Desmond and Kelvin that wasn't working so I threw it into this one. I'm glad it worked for you. I'm so pleased you liked it.
Thanks so much for the thoughtful and detailed comment. I really appreciate the time you took to go through each section. So, forgive me when I ramble back at you
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Rambling is good! And yeah, with such a theme you have to have Kate and Sawyer ;)
The Chopin section...well, at that point in the other side of the story, a woman named Janie broke into the Pearl and told Mikhail to take a break...
And soon after, while Mikhail was distracted by said woman's father who came with her and is a complete chess fanatic, KI found himself alone and Darlton had another time travel issue to explain...
Watch Mr. Tangerine, that Mikhail is a tricky sucker. Hmmmm...Wouldn't it be better to time travel Des? I mean he could briefly visit present day Rome/Toronto and then we could deposit him gently in London?
I'm glad you liked the Desmond section. I still feel I haven't written a story that captures him as well as I would like but I'm getting better I think.
I hadn't thought that it was guilt that drove Hurley to the institution the first time too. Nice catch!
I'm glad you mentioned the balloon section. I worked hard on getting that to work. As I mentioned to Janie, I planned that scene to take place with Locke but then Jack took over.
I was actually impressed with how well the Juliet section turned out. I left it to last and it just sort of wrote itself. Maybe I angst less over writing the characters I dislike. Still, she is growing on me.
As for Sawyer and Kate, you can't do a prison story without them! I am assuming it was the image of Sawyer waking up that inspired your dirty thoughts? He tends to do that, doesn't he!
Thanks so much for this lovely, lovely, crazy comment. Seriously, you are so kind and supportive. Your words make me blush.
Thanks! I actually had more planned - for Sayid, Jacob, Charlie, Eko and Ana (and then less tangible prisons for Locke, Claire and Sun) but I found some of the themes were getting repetitive and the whole thing could have gone on forever. I could do a sequel or you could...
I wrote the Hurley section first and it is my favourite too. Thanks for reading and commenting
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I really love the first part, with Kate's thoughts about where she's being held in relation to jail. How breaking down would mean that Wayne would have loved.
I also love what you did with the Desmond part. Rare is it that I pick stuff centered on him as a favorite, but I'm just in love with the format of both the letters and the observations, very much like reports we would actually see.
Overall, I really loved this! Great fic!
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The Chopin section...well, at that point in the other side of the story, a woman named Janie broke into the Pearl and told Mikhail to take a break...
And soon after, while Mikhail was distracted by said woman's father who came with her and is a complete chess fanatic, KI found himself alone and Darlton had another time travel issue to explain...
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I'm glad you liked the Desmond section. I still feel I haven't written a story that captures him as well as I would like but I'm getting better I think.
I hadn't thought that it was guilt that drove Hurley to the institution the first time too. Nice catch!
I'm glad you mentioned the balloon section. I worked hard on getting that to work. As I mentioned to Janie, I planned that scene to take place with Locke but then Jack took over.
I was actually impressed with how well the Juliet section turned out. I left it to last and it just sort of wrote itself. Maybe I angst less over writing the characters I dislike. Still, she is growing on me.
As for Sawyer and Kate, you can't do a prison story without them! I am assuming it was the image of Sawyer waking up that inspired your dirty thoughts? He tends to do that, doesn't he!
Thanks so much for this lovely, lovely, crazy comment. Seriously, you are so kind and supportive. Your words make me blush.
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Liked Hurley's best, with the Twilight Zone on the tv, but the end, with Jack and Locke watching him gave me the shivers!
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I wrote the Hurley section first and it is my favourite too. Thanks for reading and commenting
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