Scene Stealer - Fic: Detective Armani

[aingeal8c]

Title: Detective Armani
Author: Aingeal
Rating: PG
Pairing: None, it's a gen, though I am sure those of you with slashy goggles on can make something of it.
Summary: Detective Armani reflects on a first meeting.
Thanks: Thank you to lozenger8 who answered my 11th hour need for a quick beta.
Notes: This second bit of fic is set during the first meeting

Comments

[nakeisha]

I really like this.

I also like the way that we both grabbed the same scene, both wrote first person POV stories and yet chose different people and with different takes. Spooky in a way.

I could really 'hear' Ray thinking this and it's all very true. The line that hit me most of all was:

There was little point in me saying those words when I called your Dad ‘the dead Mountie thing’.

Because Ray is spot on. Anything he said then would have seemed so wrong.

[aingeal8c]

I really like this.

Thank you.

I also like the way that we both grabbed the same scene, both wrote first person POV stories and yet chose different people and with different takes. Spooky in a way.

Great Minds think alike as they say. But yeah it's nice to have both sides of the POV as it were.

I could really 'hear' Ray thinking this and it's all very true. The line that hit me most of all was:

There was little point in me saying those words when I called your Dad ‘the dead Mountie thing’.

Because Ray is spot on. Anything he said then would have seemed so wrong.

Glad Ray's voice came through.

And yeah Ray feels so guilty about the dead Mountie thing remark I am sure.

Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reading.

[nakeisha]

Indeed they do.

Yes, Ray does feel bad, you can see it on his face.

[aingeal8c]

Yeah there's some good acting in that scene from DM and PG.

[dragonflymuse]

That was really good.

You chose to write on what is most likely the single most important scene in the whole pilot, because if the first meeting between Fraser and Vecchio didn't sing, the whole series would have fallen apart. Paul and David did amazing work in that exchange, and I think you completely nailed David's motivation to do that scene so perfectly. Not only did he set up a facet of Ray's character, but a facet that he maintained faithfully throughout the series; except, like your Ray says/thinks You looked at me, really looked. You didn’t call me a jerk for insulting your dead father, you made me think about that on my own. I barely know you and yet you managed to look past the Armani, the audience gets it too, and we love Fraser all the more for not calling Ray on his hurtful behaviour.

Well done!!

[aingeal8c]

That was really good.

Thank you.

You chose to write on what is most likely the single most important scene in the whole pilot, because if the first meeting between Fraser and Vecchio didn't sing, the whole series would have fallen apart.

Yeah they had just a few mintues onscreen to show us that these guys could work well together on screen.

Paul and David did amazing work in that exchange,

Oh yes.

and I think you completely nailed David's motivation to do that scene so perfectly. Not only did he set up a facet of Ray's character, but a facet that he maintained faithfully throughout the series; except, like your Ray says/thinks You looked at me, really looked. You didn’t call me a jerk for insulting your dead father, you made me think about that on my own. I barely know you and yet you managed to look past the Armani, the audience gets it too, and we love Fraser all the more for not calling Ray on his hurtful behaviour.Thank you. That's the way I have tend to read it. It really is a multi-faceted scene for one that is so short

[nina_ds]

You looked at me, really looked. You didn’t call me a jerk for insulting your dead father, you made me think about that on my own. I barely know you and yet you managed to look past the Armani.

That right there is my favourite part!

[aingeal8c]

You looked at me, really looked. You didn’t call me a jerk for insulting your dead father, you made me think about that on my own. I barely know you and yet you managed to look past the Armani.

That right there is my favourite part!

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :-)

[aingeal8c]

I have nothing coherent to say. I just really like it.

That's enough for me. Thank you, glad you liked it :-)

[pixiecatfish]

Awwww... Poor Ray. Poor Benny. It really was fate that they found each other, wasn't it?

[aingeal8c]

Awwww... Poor Ray. Poor Benny. It really was fate that they found each other, wasn't it?

Thank you. Yes I think it was fate :-)