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Okay people so I have to do this portfolio piece for English. We have to take a piece that we have written and edit it and or re-write it. Well I decide that I wanted to finish one of the poems that I started to write, but due to lack of time was never able to finish. Well I have re-written it and I love it, but I want to see if anyone else likes it also. If you have any editing comments oh please please tell me. Don’t worry I shan’t be offended. I really need comments please this thing is due Wednesday. Oh and it isn’t directed at anyone it is just one of those things that just spills out of ones body and must be written down. Oh and if anyone can think of a title that would be great.
A flash so bright
Blinded by the light
Yet out of the gloom
Comes the phantom of a tune
Slowly it starts to build
Causing the silence to be filled
My heart starts to soar
It isn’t grounded anymore
Than the tune fades away
Slowly dieing on its way
I scream for it to return
Yet it is lost along the way
My scream falls on deaf ears
That won’t listen anyway
All I can hear in return
Are the waves that roar inside my ears
I turn around to stare
No one is there
How in the world did I get here?
Lost along the way
Forced to stay
Nothing is left in this place
Nothing that is but empty space
The music is gone
And with it my love
Why did they both fade?
Why did they choose to go away?
Yet as I contemplate
Another feeling fills the music’s empty space
It is warmth
It is joy
It is every feeling I never wished to feel
How did that happen?
Why did it start?
The numbness fades away from my heart
Is it him?
Is it this boy?
Is it the hope that there might once more be joy?
That a new song will start
And in turn fill my heart
With something that will restore it
Yet I want to run to hide
To go back in time
It isn’t right
It is wrong
There was nothing left to my love song
It had died
Yet here it is again
Now with another man
Something is wrong
You are to love once
And never again
Yet I do love this man
Maybe there is chance
Once more glance
I shall be in his arms
My heart shall be his
To take
And to break
I shall be his till one of us leaves
Till that time
I shall bask in this song
Like I do in the sun
And when it ends
If it does
I shall know that at least I have loved
And in turn have been loved
A flash so bright
Blinded by the light
Yet out of the gloom
Comes the phantom of a tune
Slowly it starts to build
Causing the silence to be filled
My heart starts to soar
It isn’t grounded anymore
Than the tune fades away
Slowly dieing on its way
I scream for it to return
Yet it is lost along the way
My scream falls on deaf ears
That won’t listen anyway
All I can hear in return
Are the waves that roar inside my ears
I turn around to stare
No one is there
How in the world did I get here?
Lost along the way
Forced to stay
Nothing is left in this place
Nothing that is but empty space
The music is gone
And with it my love
Why did they both fade?
Why did they choose to go away?
Yet as I contemplate
Another feeling fills the music’s empty space
It is warmth
It is joy
It is every feeling I never wished to feel
How did that happen?
Why did it start?
The numbness fades away from my heart
Is it him?
Is it this boy?
Is it the hope that there might once more be joy?
That a new song will start
And in turn fill my heart
With something that will restore it
Yet I want to run to hide
To go back in time
It isn’t right
It is wrong
There was nothing left to my love song
It had died
Yet here it is again
Now with another man
Something is wrong
You are to love once
And never again
Yet I do love this man
Maybe there is chance
Once more glance
I shall be in his arms
My heart shall be his
To take
And to break
I shall be his till one of us leaves
Till that time
I shall bask in this song
Like I do in the sun
And when it ends
If it does
I shall know that at least I have loved
And in turn have been loved