Angels in Death Note.
Or Series Title: Eyes of angels
Fandom: Death Note
Culprit Author's Name: Ookami Gekkani
Full Name (plus titles if any): Mark Seers (who is female) and Molly Asher, real name Sarah Kana
Full Species(es): fallen!angel!Sue and long-lost-childhood-love!angel!Sue
Hair Color (include adjectives): Mark has blonde hair, Molly "brown hair that was cut to frame her face"
Eye Color (include adjectives): Mark - gray; Molly - blue
Unusual Markings/Colorations:
Special Possessions (if any): can bring people back from the dead
Annoying Origin: Two American "physics" (physics is misused for every time psychics is meant) that Watari hired "since we’re not having any luck with the Kira case."
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Molly was childhood friends with L and before he was taken to Wammy's House, the two vowed to one day marry.
Annoying Special Abilities: Both girls are angels. In trying to redeem Mark (who is a "fallen angel"--Molly's her guardian), they save people whose names have been written into the Death Note. Mark brings Misa back to life via magic (which is not used on any of the earlier people).
Other Annoying Traits: Time is randomly distorted in the form of Molly baking from scratch in only minutes and magical pregnancies that are completed with no complications in only six months.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
“Mr. Watari?” A voice called.
“You don’t have to call him Mister.” Another one said.
“Well, it’s a bit polite.” The other voice said. The other voice groaned.
Matsuda opened the door to revel two girls. The taller had blond hair and gray eyes. The smaller had blue eyes and brown hair that was cut to frame her face. She smiled at L, and held out a package. “Hi, Mr. Ryuzaki!” She chirped and put the package on the table. “They told me how much you liked sweets, so I made you some cookies.” L nodded. “You must be Miss Asher-” “Oh no, please, call me Molly.” She said. She looked at the other girl and tugged on her sleeve.
The other girl sighed and said “Sup’ name’s Mark, that’s what you all me, ‘kay?”
I want to know why so many Suethors think it's impressive, having their character act "assertive" by way of just being rude to everyone--it's not seen as a negative trait by anyone, so the Suethor obviously doesn't intend it as a character flaw, and many of the characters who are written this way are supposed to be in professional positions, yet never display even remotely professional behavior.
“I didn’t want to be alone.” Molly said. “I…I remember a boy, he was my friend and I loved him with all my heart. He loved sweets, because they reminded him of his mother. His mother died and I loved him so much. When the police took him away to the orphanage, we made a promise to each other. From that day forward I vowed that I would find him.”
“Do you even remember his name?” L asked.
“Only his first.” Molly said. “I never knew his last name, but I will always remember that beautiful name his mother would call him.”
“What was it?”
“…Laliet.”
“…Sarah?”
“Yes?” Molly asked.
L dropped his plate and tackled the girl. He pinned her down. “Did you give up your dreams for me?! Did you become a detective just to find me?” He shouted.
Tears ran down his face as he sat up.">
A physic faux!psychic who is actually an angel is not a detective.
L's last name is Lawliet. There is no reason his mother would be calling him Laliet.
L was eight when he met up with Quillsh Wammy. I find it difficult to believe he was so socially confident as a child he had any friends, let alone a friend with whom he'd be planning a shared life.
Ashitaka Morimi
3:00pm
Hit by a bus in central park.
A red-headed man walked across a street. He was behind the usual crowd. Suddenly there was a honk, and he looked to his right to see a bus. He was frozen like a deer in the headlights.
“MOVE!!” A voice yelled.
He felt a shove and then his body hit the floor. The bus passed by as he looked up into his savior’s eyes. A small girl looked back at him. She stood up and took out a phone.
“Misa, the first is successful!” She said.
If a name is written in the Death Note, the person dies. That's it. So even if they were "saved" by these "angels", all these people would be dropping dead anyway from the default heart attack mode that would go into action once the original manner of death was rendered impossible.
Just as importantly--Misa would not work against Light. If a Death God couldn't sway her loyalty, an angel wouldn't do it either.
The "fallen angel" magically kills Light, Misa shows no remorse with Light's passing and instead hooks up with some random guy called Toby, non-fallen-angel Sue and L get together, both couples have kids in less than six months. All chapters are started and ended with "conversation" between the author and fictional characters.
Fandom: Death Note
Culprit Author's Name: Ookami Gekkani
Full Name (plus titles if any): Mark Seers (who is female) and Molly Asher, real name Sarah Kana
Full Species(es): fallen!angel!Sue and long-lost-childhood-love!angel!Sue
Hair Color (include adjectives): Mark has blonde hair, Molly "brown hair that was cut to frame her face"
Eye Color (include adjectives): Mark - gray; Molly - blue
Unusual Markings/Colorations:
Special Possessions (if any): can bring people back from the dead
Annoying Origin: Two American "physics" (physics is misused for every time psychics is meant) that Watari hired "since we’re not having any luck with the Kira case."
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Molly was childhood friends with L and before he was taken to Wammy's House, the two vowed to one day marry.
Annoying Special Abilities: Both girls are angels. In trying to redeem Mark (who is a "fallen angel"--Molly's her guardian), they save people whose names have been written into the Death Note. Mark brings Misa back to life via magic (which is not used on any of the earlier people).
Other Annoying Traits: Time is randomly distorted in the form of Molly baking from scratch in only minutes and magical pregnancies that are completed with no complications in only six months.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
“Mr. Watari?” A voice called.
“You don’t have to call him Mister.” Another one said.
“Well, it’s a bit polite.” The other voice said. The other voice groaned.
Matsuda opened the door to revel two girls. The taller had blond hair and gray eyes. The smaller had blue eyes and brown hair that was cut to frame her face. She smiled at L, and held out a package. “Hi, Mr. Ryuzaki!” She chirped and put the package on the table. “They told me how much you liked sweets, so I made you some cookies.” L nodded. “You must be Miss Asher-” “Oh no, please, call me Molly.” She said. She looked at the other girl and tugged on her sleeve.
The other girl sighed and said “Sup’ name’s Mark, that’s what you all me, ‘kay?”
I want to know why so many Suethors think it's impressive, having their character act "assertive" by way of just being rude to everyone--it's not seen as a negative trait by anyone, so the Suethor obviously doesn't intend it as a character flaw, and many of the characters who are written this way are supposed to be in professional positions, yet never display even remotely professional behavior.
“I didn’t want to be alone.” Molly said. “I…I remember a boy, he was my friend and I loved him with all my heart. He loved sweets, because they reminded him of his mother. His mother died and I loved him so much. When the police took him away to the orphanage, we made a promise to each other. From that day forward I vowed that I would find him.”
“Do you even remember his name?” L asked.
“Only his first.” Molly said. “I never knew his last name, but I will always remember that beautiful name his mother would call him.”
“What was it?”
“…Laliet.”
“…Sarah?”
“Yes?” Molly asked.
L dropped his plate and tackled the girl. He pinned her down. “Did you give up your dreams for me?! Did you become a detective just to find me?” He shouted.
Tears ran down his face as he sat up.">
A physic faux!psychic who is actually an angel is not a detective.
L's last name is Lawliet. There is no reason his mother would be calling him Laliet.
L was eight when he met up with Quillsh Wammy. I find it difficult to believe he was so socially confident as a child he had any friends, let alone a friend with whom he'd be planning a shared life.
Ashitaka Morimi
3:00pm
Hit by a bus in central park.
A red-headed man walked across a street. He was behind the usual crowd. Suddenly there was a honk, and he looked to his right to see a bus. He was frozen like a deer in the headlights.
“MOVE!!” A voice yelled.
He felt a shove and then his body hit the floor. The bus passed by as he looked up into his savior’s eyes. A small girl looked back at him. She stood up and took out a phone.
“Misa, the first is successful!” She said.
If a name is written in the Death Note, the person dies. That's it. So even if they were "saved" by these "angels", all these people would be dropping dead anyway from the default heart attack mode that would go into action once the original manner of death was rendered impossible.
Just as importantly--Misa would not work against Light. If a Death God couldn't sway her loyalty, an angel wouldn't do it either.
The "fallen angel" magically kills Light, Misa shows no remorse with Light's passing and instead hooks up with some random guy called Toby, non-fallen-angel Sue and L get together, both couples have kids in less than six months. All chapters are started and ended with "conversation" between the author and fictional characters.