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Story Or Series Title: Game!
Fandom: Death Note
Culprit Author's Name: jychan
Full Name (plus titles if any): Shigeru Lawliet, alias Ryuzaki Shiho. Calls herself "Mistress Of Disguise" in third chapter; L calls her the same in final chapter.
Full Species(es): L's wife Sue
Hair Color (include adjectives): n/a
Eye Color (include adjectives): n/a
Unusual Markings/Colorations:
Special Possessions (if any): L as a spouse, L's kid
Annoying Origin: She met L in Wammy's House and they fell in love.
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Member of the Japanese Task Force. After L's "death" Mello and Near together take down Kira, but only succeed because of her influence.
Annoying Special Abilities: Manages to be included in every situation that goes down during the Kira Investigaton no matter that there's no useful reason for her to be included--attends classes with Light and L, is brought on the rescue-Matsuda-operation, retcons the L and Light fight so she herself is the one who stops it, and so on.
Other Annoying Traits: Is with L, during the Kira case, and making no secret of the fact she's L's wife. Uses L's real name in the Japanese Task Force headquarters when she's first there, despite the other members being able to walk in the room at any moment; makes L act physically affectionate with her in public. Honestly, most of the time, this is just straight up Death Note with no more change than commentary from her character, except for the times she has the Sue "save the day" by solving conflict or being the first to figure out things, and all the added scenes of her and L acting what appears to be the Suethor's idea of "married."
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
"Well, since we're husband and wife, as you said a while ago, shouldn't we share the problems each one encounters?" insisted Shigeru with a pout while L hugged her from behind,
" OK. Fine. You're in." said L as he sighed while Shigeru just chuckled,
"Arigato Lawliet," she thanked him with a smack on the lips,
"You know me much, do you," said L while he smiled,
"Whatever..." said Shigeru as she rolled her eyes, then suddenly L tickled her,
"Oy!!! L! Cut it out... Hahahahahha..." cried Shigeru as she was laughing then she lay down on the couch while L was on top of her,
"Cut it out!"she complained while laughing in which L sweat dropped but continued on tickling her, and then a few men went in,
"Ahhhh... oy, stop it now. Look," said Shigeru as she pointed to the direction,
"Ah... Yagami-san. Matsuda-san. Aizawa-san." recognized L and then the couple stood up That L did not find her presence necessary to the Kira Case to include her originally says a lot, and not in the way the Suethor intended. If L did ever marry, it's doubtful he would prevent a spouse from working with him, if he suspected they could be useful, but I'm also sure, in such a scenario, he'd never allow them to reveal they were in fact his spouse. Protection comes more effectively in behaving as a member of a top secret organization than it does through airing romantic declarations.
What did he mean? I glanced at L, who was smirking. A vein popped on my temples as fire from hell was behind me, and the next second, I was chasing L all over the room. I caught up with him and hit him on the back of his head, "Itaii desu." he complained but I hugged him afterwards, "I was really worried at the first, but now I am greatly relieved," I told him, he grinned and snickered and pointed the position we were in as Matsuda-san, Mogi-san and Aizawa-san was looking at us.
"Eh? Ooohps." I said as I released him,
"Well, later, I hope I'll be heating your body," he teased as Matsuda's jaw literally dropped, Mogi-san blushed while Aizawa -san spanked his temples,
"Urusai neh, Ryuzaki!" I scolded him, as I blushed at the same time. Reacting to situations is pretty much all this Sue does. Makes you wonder why the Suethor even bothered doing a story, when she had no story. She never lets up on the untranslated Japanese, nor does she explain why the only ones speaking Japanese within a mostly-Japanese cast are two of the three people from the UK.
"Urusai! I know no person! Especially if you're a stalker!" she replied, glaring much more,
"I suppose I had a very good disguise then. Shame on the Mistress of Disguise." the person said, smirking,
Shigeru rolled her eyes but then, glared again, while the person took off the cap and the coat,
"So, you don't recognize your husband?"
"L..." she recognized and then she hugged him while tears went down her eyes, but then, hit his head,
"BAKA! Why did you just return now! Do you know how much I missed you?" she asked, glaring at him,
"Hehehe, I was just revived months ago, in which, I had Mello and Near tell me what happened through the years. Sadly, I was told the Kira case was over and it was really Yagami Light. My suspicions were correct after all." he replied,
"I see..."
"I, somehow, researched about where you lived and what was your current situation since after I died, you somehow, disappeared. And then, I seemed to see that I have a son." he said, smirking.
Yay! Inexplicable revival! And conveniently getting pregnant just before your spouse dies so you have a momento of him! How touching! Pffft, this story was so filled with contrivance and OOC-ness that it never was a story.
- crossposted to marysues
Fandom: Death Note
Culprit Author's Name: jychan
Full Name (plus titles if any): Shigeru Lawliet, alias Ryuzaki Shiho. Calls herself "Mistress Of Disguise" in third chapter; L calls her the same in final chapter.
Full Species(es): L's wife Sue
Hair Color (include adjectives): n/a
Eye Color (include adjectives): n/a
Unusual Markings/Colorations:
Special Possessions (if any): L as a spouse, L's kid
Annoying Origin: She met L in Wammy's House and they fell in love.
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Member of the Japanese Task Force. After L's "death" Mello and Near together take down Kira, but only succeed because of her influence.
Annoying Special Abilities: Manages to be included in every situation that goes down during the Kira Investigaton no matter that there's no useful reason for her to be included--attends classes with Light and L, is brought on the rescue-Matsuda-operation, retcons the L and Light fight so she herself is the one who stops it, and so on.
Other Annoying Traits: Is with L, during the Kira case, and making no secret of the fact she's L's wife. Uses L's real name in the Japanese Task Force headquarters when she's first there, despite the other members being able to walk in the room at any moment; makes L act physically affectionate with her in public. Honestly, most of the time, this is just straight up Death Note with no more change than commentary from her character, except for the times she has the Sue "save the day" by solving conflict or being the first to figure out things, and all the added scenes of her and L acting what appears to be the Suethor's idea of "married."
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
"Well, since we're husband and wife, as you said a while ago, shouldn't we share the problems each one encounters?" insisted Shigeru with a pout while L hugged her from behind,
" OK. Fine. You're in." said L as he sighed while Shigeru just chuckled,
"Arigato Lawliet," she thanked him with a smack on the lips,
"You know me much, do you," said L while he smiled,
"Whatever..." said Shigeru as she rolled her eyes, then suddenly L tickled her,
"Oy!!! L! Cut it out... Hahahahahha..." cried Shigeru as she was laughing then she lay down on the couch while L was on top of her,
"Cut it out!"she complained while laughing in which L sweat dropped but continued on tickling her, and then a few men went in,
"Ahhhh... oy, stop it now. Look," said Shigeru as she pointed to the direction,
"Ah... Yagami-san. Matsuda-san. Aizawa-san." recognized L and then the couple stood up That L did not find her presence necessary to the Kira Case to include her originally says a lot, and not in the way the Suethor intended. If L did ever marry, it's doubtful he would prevent a spouse from working with him, if he suspected they could be useful, but I'm also sure, in such a scenario, he'd never allow them to reveal they were in fact his spouse. Protection comes more effectively in behaving as a member of a top secret organization than it does through airing romantic declarations.
What did he mean? I glanced at L, who was smirking. A vein popped on my temples as fire from hell was behind me, and the next second, I was chasing L all over the room. I caught up with him and hit him on the back of his head, "Itaii desu." he complained but I hugged him afterwards, "I was really worried at the first, but now I am greatly relieved," I told him, he grinned and snickered and pointed the position we were in as Matsuda-san, Mogi-san and Aizawa-san was looking at us.
"Eh? Ooohps." I said as I released him,
"Well, later, I hope I'll be heating your body," he teased as Matsuda's jaw literally dropped, Mogi-san blushed while Aizawa -san spanked his temples,
"Urusai neh, Ryuzaki!" I scolded him, as I blushed at the same time. Reacting to situations is pretty much all this Sue does. Makes you wonder why the Suethor even bothered doing a story, when she had no story. She never lets up on the untranslated Japanese, nor does she explain why the only ones speaking Japanese within a mostly-Japanese cast are two of the three people from the UK.
"Urusai! I know no person! Especially if you're a stalker!" she replied, glaring much more,
"I suppose I had a very good disguise then. Shame on the Mistress of Disguise." the person said, smirking,
Shigeru rolled her eyes but then, glared again, while the person took off the cap and the coat,
"So, you don't recognize your husband?"
"L..." she recognized and then she hugged him while tears went down her eyes, but then, hit his head,
"BAKA! Why did you just return now! Do you know how much I missed you?" she asked, glaring at him,
"Hehehe, I was just revived months ago, in which, I had Mello and Near tell me what happened through the years. Sadly, I was told the Kira case was over and it was really Yagami Light. My suspicions were correct after all." he replied,
"I see..."
"I, somehow, researched about where you lived and what was your current situation since after I died, you somehow, disappeared. And then, I seemed to see that I have a son." he said, smirking.
Yay! Inexplicable revival! And conveniently getting pregnant just before your spouse dies so you have a momento of him! How touching! Pffft, this story was so filled with contrivance and OOC-ness that it never was a story.
- crossposted to marysues